Reviews of HP: A Magical Journey [Complete]

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Not good not bad this fanfic is in the middle. (4th year hp ending review) Plus - MC isnt like i am the best of everything type of guy so you wont read one man show where other chars dont matter Negative - he doesnt have any motivation nor some depth of character. You can sum MC with "i like magic" but nothing more. He is just that. why this is something negative, read Negative3 Negative 2 - this one is a big one. VAULTS. They are the extantion of the first negative. Like i wrote he is just a i_like_magic guy soo what should he do with all his time in Hogwarts? we give him some random vaults nobody can pass so he can be different from some random nobody. First vault was a good one, they put something in it for safety sake etc. But after that other vaults turn into kind of missing legacy mixed with deathly trap (%50-%50). Why anyone leave some kind of vault in a some random school (think from their angle these vaults are old things) our they built the school after vaults but to sum it up vaults are meh.. Negative 3 - magic in the novel is just the word magic nothing more no mystery in it no content of it.. to understand you need to read the fanfic.

Bad story writing Mc keep hiding his power No character depth Mc is plain for me Mc is supposed to be an adult but act like 5 yrs old some time which is very annoying Explanation regarding why mc use wandless magic doesnt make any sense to me This novel was waste of time for me May be other would like it but for me it was not so good

This story used to be one of my favorite stories but lately it has become less and less interesting. The character has changed so much and nothing really happens. He is so passive that I can already guess what will happen. I had completely skipped the chapters about the Juleball because they were really chapters in which did nothing happen and were simply unnecessary. I just hate it when it has romance in a story as it often destroys the whole story. Most of the time it's just about the girl or girls and the rest of the story takes a back seat. I'm a little disappointed that the same thing happened in this story. The last few chapters didn't really do anything, and the whole story was losing content. I hate that I have to write such a review as I really loved the book but I just can't continue reading it.

Hey i love your work kuuroke no basket and this one too. Please make it a harem with daphne , Ivy and fleur it will be awesome as they Get along well and multiple marriages are legal in magical britain . This my request as last fanfic is a sIngle rom-com and make this a Harem and Action-adventure as it will give you drive to write . It wOrked for me beCaus- I myself wrote rise of house black till 50 chapters but rewrote it till 25 and gave up As My college started.

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Honestly this story is somehow good and bad at the same time, without a doubt its one of the best Harry Potter novels on the site, but certain stuff happen within the novel that just push it downwards for me. I can look past the whole no wand thing and to be completely upfront the age thing is weird and I don't understand why writers keep trying to do this, please stop - concerning his real age being higher than Quins age. Also, the whole Umbridge thing just made 0 sense, he let someone practically ruin the school, conduct child abuse -this being conducted on some of his friends- etc because using your family name to get rid of her would be 'weak' as if he hasn't done that throughout the novel (e.g. Rita, Draco), it's just funny at this point and makes no sense. He literally tied up ivy when she transformed into Daphne because he cares for his friends, but then basically turns the other cheek when Harry gets abused by Umbridge, make it make sense lol. Concerning the whole ivy thing the romance around her and the mc doesn't really make much sense but it's not my novel so I guess if you can look past it its okay. I am sure the writer was trying to convey some sort of character development but the way they went about doing this was incredibly poor. Like maybe instead he could have made a bet with his sister or grandfather that limits him using his family's powers or something, anything would have been better than what was actually done in the novel. Overall, the novel is okay, has good writing, upload intervals and world background, but the story development and character design weigh it down considerably.

Story was good until around chapter 150, after that it's just awful Mc sucks, his personality sucks, side characters suck, Ivy sucks more than anything, Drama suck, the Romance can go kill itself, Author is a Pos, and doesn't have any morals. If I could give less than a 1 star I would... I wish I could remove this terrible book out of my head🤮

well not really to my liking i didnt read that far but what made me drop it was how stupid the mc reacted to the wand, like i get it, wands make it easier to cast magic and his wandless magic might degrade but if that happens thats just because the mc stopped practicing wandless magic. Also this an AU of HP so that just means that the author will change the world to fit his character and not the other way around, what i mean by that is that they have potholes but then use "its an alternate universe so its different". some might like but i dont. good luck on your story author

I'm tempted to just put 1 star to all of them but i wont. you have created a incredible story, yet managed to ruin it for many people including myself. i will continue reading any other stories you may create in the future,but this is the end of the road for this story. thank you for your efforts and if you do read this author, i hope you don't ruin any future works you make.

At Chapter 11. Why does he revert being a child even tho he already have a past live? It seems so forced, that he is feeling so scared just before applying to Hogwart.

This started well until the sinvault came…. Lots dislike there(seen in chapter comments)… Then everything was fine for a while until the author noticed that readers propably enjoy the story a little too much…. So he reintroduced the sinvault rehashing literally everything everyone previously disliked during that arc… And as a cherry on top, after 300ish chapters, he then decides it is now time to get a second girlfriend….. Add the Tag…. Be polite and save people the time…

well, the story was interesting, although I regret reading it this far, chap. 144, I feel like I should have jumped right into it just to read what I wanted to know before going on, but unfortunately I didn't. back to the subject, in all of the harry potter fanfics my favorite arc is the triwizard tournament, it doesn't matter if the mc will do anything else fun, overt or hidden, but since he won't participate, well, the story is dead for me. of course, if it were just that, i wouldn't stop reading the story so easily, but the author has a certain fondness for mystery that i have a great disdain, i don't even know how i got here. not the kind of mystery where the autor hides the plot from the reader, but the mystery where the autor hides the mc actions from the reader, this is the mystery i hate the most, it totally breaks my immersion in the story separating the mc from the reader. get the mc to talk about something, just for you can cut the event off in the next moment only to resume many chapters later when he's already performing the action? nah, it's not for me. I can't characterize the story as bad just for it, far from it, it's well written and with few edges, but for me, it was easier to read a story full of edges without these two problems, so... here I say goodbye, I hope this criticism help those with the same notion by avoiding something I could have avoided. ps: I really found the idea of ​​coffers totally unnecessary, just adding plot full of information where it could be spent building relationships, but since you focused on magic and stuff, I can't criticize a monkey for liking bananas, anyway... Good Luck.

i am really enjoying this fanfic. definitely in my top 3 HP fanfics.I like the MC isn't insanely op that instead he faces set backs and has to work hard to improve. this makes milestones in the novel feel earned. furthermore I appreciate the cautious but still kind nature of the mc. the characters feel like real people and we slowly gain a better understanding of them which is great. though I do feel the mc's sister is a little overlooked and underdeveloped. I know this book is supposed to be break for the author because of burnout but I really hope more focus can be put on it because so far it's fantastic. my only criticism would be for more updates and a consistent release schedule.

Maybe the story gets better in the later chapters but form what little I read I absolutely hate it. There just is something about the way this story is told that rubs me wrong. A combination of uninspired blandness and small but very obvious logical mistakes.

3 only this novel has a big potential and wasted i think mc like china cultivate mc in a 6 chapters mc change personality eddie,luna and marcys just annoying and only created for word count"i think" but probably not. their all talks are annoying and borign just these there of you make me hate this novel and the 7 deadly sins part too (writer have a depression that time i think) i can only say wrong minor characters boring dialogs mc's personality sucks(and change to ultimate sucks to normal sucks per 6 chapters) and beacuse of chapter per day is too high writer chan cant produce sone thing good i think writer only 3-4 chapters per week to be just good as start

This is good. the first 50 chap is an interesting slow-pace plot, but the latter chap become a boring info dump slow pace story

look ill be fair to the author most of this story was fine, but that's all I could say about the good parts, they're fine, not great , not brilliant just fine, middle of the road, the main character, was great, until the author created a convoluted storyline solely for making a harem, so now people have invest money/time on what the thought was a decent story with an interesting main character, only for the author to hide the fact this is a harem story, the mc was in a relationship, when this other girl kissed him and because of a curse he is now in a relationship with the girl he loves and an unnecessary tag along stalker, please author listen to your audience, they have supported you emotionally, and monetarily, to see them be spat on and ignored is heart breaking. WE DESERVE BETTER

a uncontestable story, and is and forever will be one of the best things webnovel will ever have on their website. the Grammer and diction is supreme, the story is throughout and planned with clear relatable and realistic relationships and people. the main character no matter how strong he gets is never the strongest, being able to dump on both Voldemort and Dumbledore, no even at the last fight he isn't as powerful as them through the power of power armor.

The story started off good. Expanding the potter universe greatly. the MC is outgoing and intelligent but he seemed to deviate off the plot to do side missions endlessly. Playing passive, claiming it was to protect his family, he mostly goes through the same hesitant motions when interacting with the Golden trio or major plot over and over again. Its so repetitive that its gotten old and stale. The author uses deception to keep you guessing about love interests, friends, and enemies. You could erase 80% of the story and you'd basically have the original plot with a smarter Harry and his sister. Its sad to see such a story go to waste. But the author wanted to be different so badly he ended up with this. hey at least some folk enjoyed it. I Suspect the final bad guy to be his wand he seems so terrified of. lololol