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DetachedDreamer9hCommentedCh 101 Title at the end- DetachedDreamer9hReplied to NihilisticMelon
you have to make a deal every time you use them or have to be an uchiha and put them under an illusion, no conditions needed for the other two, but you choose the snake ๐๐คฃ๐๐น๐๐คฃ๐๐น. you just want to sound cool. but thats just a st*pid answer.
Now a question for you: If you came to the world of Naruto, which of the Three Wise Lands would you make a contract with if you were given a chance? - DetachedDreamer3dCommented
spiked down = collapsed
"Fuโฆ You made the right choice. The real estate market in America spiked down." - DetachedDreamer5dReplied to Sidecharacter1
just call it an AU, we all know a nerf when we see one.
The difference between a pure-blood Uchiha and a half-breed lay in their stamina, in how long they could keep the Sharingan activated along with less chakra cost. For her and others of her lineage, it was a gift and a burden as it blossomed through tragedy. - DetachedDreamer7dCommented
lol a villian in Harry Potter? lol ๐ ๐คฃ ๐ ๐น ๐ ๐คฃ ๐ ๐น ๐ ๐คฃ ๐ ๐น ๐ ๐คฃ ๐ ๐น ๐ ๐คฃ ๐ ๐น ๐ ๐คฃ ๐ ๐น ๐ ๐คฃ ๐ ๐น ๐ ๐คฃ ๐ ๐น ๐ ๐คฃ ๐ ๐น ๐ ๐คฃ ๐ ๐น ๐ ๐คฃ ๐ ๐น ๐ ๐คฃ
Ch 1 A New Shelby - DetachedDreamer9dReplied to DetachedDreamer
oh no wonder, you wrote that terrible fate story about the hyuga. Jesus i know this story sucks for sure now ๐ ๐คฃ ๐ ๐น ๐ ๐คฃ ๐ ๐น ๐ ๐คฃ ๐ ๐น ๐ ๐คฃ ๐ ๐น ๐ ๐คฃ ๐ ๐น ๐ ๐คฃ ๐ ๐น ๐ ๐คฃ ๐ ๐น ๐ ๐คฃ ๐ ๐น ๐ ๐คฃ ๐ ๐น ๐ ๐คฃ ๐ ๐น ๐ ๐คฃ ๐ ๐น ๐ ๐คฃ ๐ ๐น
Ch 1 The Awakening of Hikari Hyuga - DetachedDreamer9dPosted
- DetachedDreamer11dReplied to Starlessii
- DetachedDreamer11dCommented
hopefully he gets some revenge on the journalist or this will be a let down.
He rolled his eyes, before opening the paper again. "Read the rest yourself kiddo. And for god's sake- don't try and talk down to someone who's gonna write about you. You be patient with them, no matter how illogical their line of questioning is, you just endure. They make a mistake, nobody gives a flying rat's ass. You make a mistake? And all of a sudden everyone and their mother will be cussing you out. They'll stop after a week, forgive and move on. But here's the thing Rickyโฆ they'll forgive, but never forget. Some random schmuck in the future will dig it up, and use it against you, smearing you all over again. Just remember that, and you're golden." He finished, before proceeding to read the paper again. - DetachedDreamer15dReplied to DetachedDreamer
- DetachedDreamer15dCommentedCh 29 Chapter 29: The Morning After
- DetachedDreamer15dPosted
All I ask for is 1% originality. its hard writing something original at this point, I get that, but just 1 percent. this is like .0000001 original. this story follows every other mediocre fanfic on here with the same core plot points. they aren't good, Idk why people think it is. the drama in this story is so horrendous and unnatural that you just gag, maybe laugh, might be confused. idk. Mom basically just says "well guys its about that time for me to die, seeya!" then she bounces and his friend snaps. I can't even believe this a thing. honestly I couldn't finish, im hoping its all an illusion and he wakes up from this terribly constructed dream. and I say if you aren't going to change an event then shut the f*ck up about it, say its inevitable and move on. or change it, maybe there's consequences but crying about it then not being able to do a thing? thats just bad writing. the worst. another mediocre story and another failure. on to the next one.
- DetachedDreamer15dCommented
what a terrible chapter. using parents as emotional catalysts or character growth, or just drama is generic, cliche, and dull, etc. we are all numb to it. this is that point where you realize this story is another run of the mill fanfic that has nothing at all holding itself apart from the others. you had two very close friends that you. could of lost. that would of been shocking but any death after just comes off as forced after this. good try at least, its not bad.
Ch 26 Chapter 26: Falling Leaves - DetachedDreamer18dCommented
gotta love sheldon
"Oh, I'm sorry to hear that for you," the child said somberly with pity. - DetachedDreamer18dReplied to maskhara
controlling the amount of chakra a clone has is a huge benefit and while it was never said, getting 95% of your chakra back from clones doesn't seem like a nerf. overall it seems fair. dispelling clones one at a time might be a slight fix anyway.
The information influx also helped put the original Naruto's training into perspective. The transfer aches like crazy and I only had 2 clones physically training, not even with jutsus. However, when I dispelled them I had gotten a huge headache from it. Thinking of the thousands of clones that Naruto was able to use and dispel when he was training made my eyes cross.