Diyen_Pi
loving the novel so far. would love to see a chapter or few detailing the lore of the two worlds at some point, like is there anything more than the walled city or what happened in the early days of the war with the elves. maybe even a few details about the elves world just so we have a better understanding of what might be happening in the world d even of the Mc doesn't.
Childish, naive and average. There is literally no background to anything. No information about the world or how it came to the state it is now. No information about any sort of past of our MC. The MC himself is naive and beta. Alien race (elves) attacks earth, kills millions of ppl, kills his comrades in arms in a prolonged war, and he decides to trust and help the aliens, because of a woman he met twice and barely even spoke to. The entire idea that a random lieutenant can agree to an invitation to peace talks from enemies, without reporting anything or orders from high command is a joke. There is no immersion, and all the characters, MC included, are 2D (not only do we have no background, the entire plot is rushed and fast paced, we have no idea about MCs feelings or inner thoughts). The plot itself, at least until what I've read (30 chapters) was cliche.
First off, the title is very deceptive. The Author used the term 'Dragonborn' to draw in people thinking it'd be linked to The Elder Scrolls. It isn't. It's a sh*tty cliche ridden story with as much creativity and depth to it as a five year old's crayon drawing. The Protagonist is a insufferable fool with no spine, there is no proper world building or background AT ALL, and it uses so many tropes that if this novel were a building it would be foreclosed then bulldozed. One of the examples is how the protagonist supposedly was fighting on the front lines against the Elves for five years, witnessing the deaths of many friends and fellow humans but he fell in love at first sight with a Elven Princess from the race that murdered millions of Humans in an unprovoked war of aggression. Not only that but the Princess of the Elves somehow knew that he was the system user, teleported to him then then betrayed her race by telling him about an upcoming attack on that city simply because she felt his magic dragon transformation due to her super special secret talent and desperarely wanted his dragon c*ck-*cough* I mean dragon magic. Even worse is how Erend is STILL an incompetant coward that shakes in his boots and freezes up when the Elves attack after five years of fighting on the frontline. He even gets shouted at to remind him to shoot at the enemy in the first chapter! 2/5 Stars.
sorry to say this bro because i hate to be a bad guy. but your story pace is so slow and fighting is too slow and prolonged i feel like MC and every good guy is stupid and idiot beyond reason. you may enjoy a long and winding and slow and very very delayed battle but i sure not enjoy it. . i give honest star review at least, but for now i dropping your story for good
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