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Beneath The Cloudy Sky

MayDreamer

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MayDreamer
MayDreamerAuthorMayDreamer

Why should you not read this novel? •The writing style is simple •The Grammar sucks •Limited Vocabulary Why should you read this novel? Even I as an author don't have an answer to this question, I know what's the negative point but the positive I don't know it yet, but I believe this story is more like a healing process for myself and maybe for many others who have been struggling with themselves and have felt like giving up any particular moment of life. This is a message for them, 'Dear you are worthy, you are brave and I am thankful that you decided to stay.'

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koshi_
koshi_Lv4koshi_

Before I write my review, I would like to say something about the review that the author has made. Can I say I'm confused wheather I should laugh or applaud at your bravery? Your review is both hilarious and courageous at the same time! And now, here is my opinion:- Update stability — daily. So here goes the 5 stars. World background — I'll give here a 5 stars. The story has taken place in the modern time of China, and author has looked into the small details such as bowing heads, and using words like baba, ge, and so on that indicates the Chinese culture. Story development — The author has created some nice twists and plots here. I'm very curious about Ning's condition. One moment she is happy and at another moment, she is tormented by something, I wonder why? And why Feng used to dream about her suicide? Are they some kind of fated lovers or something? And that senior who bullies Ning, what kind of relation he shares with the MC... So many questions, but of course it'll be revealed only by the time. So it's a 5 stars for me. Character design— That's the best part of this story! And absolutely 5 stars here! Ling, the best friend of MC seems very fun loving cool personality. She is extremely protective of MC as well. But how she was guiltstruck in the initial chapters (before the time-travel) makes me wary of her. I hope this time Feng will be able to stop her from doing something bad. Feng, the male lead.— He is likable so far, and I have high expectations from him as he have to save not only the MC but also other side characters from drowning into the grief. Yuan has to be my favourite character in this book! Even I like him a lot, probably more than the main characters! He has a nice sense of humour, and he reads others mind like no one else. Ning, the main character. What can I say about her except I want to protect her so badly. This fragile girl carries so many layr of mysteries around her. Lastly the character I hate with a passion is Taotao guy. I hope he gets what he deserves. He is so evil. But I can't put all the blame on him, since it seems like his mother has made him the spoilt one that he is. Here every character is mysterious one way or another except Yuan. And Hua Ming, is he going to be back? What about Kai? has his journey ended already? Writing quality— The author writes in easy language that carries strong emotions. She knows how to make the readers understand the deepness of her words. The author is good at making the readers feel empathy for the characters. So 5 stars again. Now, the flip side here, No one is perfect grammatically, so there is no point in commenting on that. But I would say there are few typos here and there, it would be good if the author re-reads her work once in a while, that would help her to find those typos as it is not easy to spot all the mistakes at once. And sometimes the author ends up writing the gestures of the characters in the middle of the dialogue, for example, in chapter 20, there is a dialogue– ["You *looks at the boys* make me feel safe..."] Instead of writing the action of her eyes in the middle of dialogue, you could write it like ["You..." she looked at the boys and continued, "...guys make me feel safe."] This is just a suggestion though. you are writing two books and giving daily updates in both of the books is already great enough. So, no pressure, just write the way you feel is right. Well done on coming up with another great idea of the book. Some day I'll come back to read and reveal the mysteries of this book. For now, I am excusing myself. Happy writing! Also, if I said something extra, sorry not sorry 😉

Book_Pen
Book_PenLv3Book_Pen

Love the plot and the way the author made it intriguing. The writing style protrays how author wants to add every emotion to make it fun, sad and excited at the same time. Good work!! However, they are a few points that I kind of didn't like(purely personnel opinion). The length of the chapters, the sudden and at once throw of character info, the way the author differentiated two places or scenarios. I feel such a good plot and a fantastic writing skill shouldn't be hindered by some minute details. But frankly, love the plot and execution!

TheSuccessor
TheSuccessorLv2TheSuccessor

This book is actually pretty fine to read. There is a lot of dialogue, which I like in a story. I actually had some fun reading this, although I'm not too sure if this is a mystery or romance book.

Loctovia
LoctoviaLv15Loctovia

It's an emotional one here. The author has a good grasp on how to use the words to portray those emotions. I went on a rollercoaster ride with this and I loved every bit of it. Great work!

Aeirana
AeiranaLv11Aeirana

I think this story does have a lot of potential. I see the characters are well thought out. But, I do believe that the readers would benefit more from the story if you were to refrain from doing "character info" panels in the chapters. Instead, try to integrate that into the story itself where we can read and understand the characters/world/plot as the story goes on. The info dumps in the chapters make the story kind of clunky and hard to read. I do want to get to know the characters and the world, but it's hard to figure out if one part is the story or the "info". This is my honest opinion. I definitely think you have something solid here and it can definitely be great. There is room for improvement. But very good effort so far!

Lizabelle88
Lizabelle88Lv5Lizabelle88

This is the type of story that can make a reader emotional. While I'm reading the chapters, I got tears in my eyes. Ning's death and now Feng... I was heartbroken, good thing, both characters are back live. I'm curious why Ning killed herself and why her best friend and her husband seems to be guilty? This is a novel filled with mystery, it's addicting and interesting. Good job Author!

ChellyArks
ChellyArksLv2ChellyArks

A good start. The writing quality at the start almost made me back out when I saw the script format, but reading ahead made me want to read more. The development of the plot and characters are moving along nicely, and I'll look forward to seeing what comes next

RomanceFanatic028
RomanceFanatic028Lv4RomanceFanatic028

First of all, your writing style is amazing. I don't care what others think but i really enjoyed reading it. But author please don't add any third person between Ning and feng because they look so cute together. So now, i have only one thing to say

Kailykilimo
KailykilimoLv3Kailykilimo

It's a good read, it was fun reading the novel. Keep up the good work author, out here waiting for more updates. l wish you all the best in the competition.

Chase_Xavier_123
Chase_Xavier_123Lv3Chase_Xavier_123

That's a great story, would love to read further. Writing Quality - It's not bad but it's not a piece of well established English literature. Don't expect it, it's unrealistic to think i can read those without sleeping. The story keeps you reading cause language is light. What's making the story feel heavy are the emotions described. there are some mistake, i would suggest the author to check them. the grammar was good, but the travel from city A to city S was confusing slightly. Story development - It slowly transitions, like it feels like a slow song playing. I loved that author took time to show rebirth rather than doing it in one chapter. Character design - Though i won't say anything about Ning since her character is new and info given was small to say anything except for her depression, sadness which she tries to mask. (should be hard cause the way she lash out to Feng, either ling is too dense to notice it or its her character flaw (flaws are okay it's not authors fault every character is flawed in a way.)) Feng as the story says he is in denial that Ning means anything to him he tries to help her either way. He is helpful (too helpful), as we see how he saves Kai even his own mother was late. Ling and her husband, Should i hate them or like them? I can only do one 👀, i will wait to decide. but upto now ling is being a good best friend though. but compared to yuan she is nothing. updating Stability - Just putting one chapter out there needs, idea, outline, writing it, procastinating whilst finding character names for new characters, lots of reasearch, editing, grammar check, and courage to put it out. 🎉 try your best author you are doing great. World background - It's simple as story is done in modern times,a little bit work with how you define place of scene happening. Rest was too good the nova and the old lady this stands out compared to other rebirth reincarnation novels. Give it try people the story won't disappoint 😁.

FantasyBliss30
FantasyBliss30Lv12FantasyBliss30

It is a very sweet fiction, that came from the sweetest place. The MC is likeable and has a distinct contrast personality-wise with the ML that makes their interaction even more memorable. The story development is very intriguing and a definite page turner. The writing quality is pretty good, with only a few typos here and there. Overall, will be a very enjoyable romantic read if you give this a chance. Please continue, author. :D

Stormzz
StormzzLv13Stormzz

The story does a good job of teasing the reader with an interesting premise. We're given detailed character descriptions, although I dislike the author's choice to tell them to us directly in informative notes, rather than weaving them into the story. The writing quality could be improved with better punctuation and grammar.

Rathowm
RathowmLv1Rathowm

This has me captivated instantly. The story is heavy, and these characters feel real. Feng is a great character- rooting for you my man. Please keep writing, I'm enjoying this.

WorthyAdversary
WorthyAdversaryLv1WorthyAdversary

A really good storyline so far. My only qualms with this novel would be the subpar grammar and spelling that shows up. But, aside from that, the rest of the novel is really good so far. The story development is really nice, especially with the foreshadowing. I'll make another review once this novel reaches 50+ chapters.

AMonarch
AMonarchLv2AMonarch

I don't typically read romance or slice of life novels so this was something new to me. Although in the first chapter I was having to adjust to a new genre of story telling, I have to say I am glad I did. Personally I find the story to be slow paced which would make sense considering that it is a slice of life. Nevertheless, I could definitely see a lot of people who enjoy this genre getting into this novel and finding themselves attached to it. I don't know why but reading this reminded me of "Erased". I really enjoyed that anime so I guess it would make sense why I seem to find this novel a good read since the aspect of saving someone stuck to me. Definitely a good read.

Mayline
MaylineLv4Mayline

Okay hear me out. This story has a lot of potential. The chapters are very long and there are plenty of characters with different personalities. The author makes it easy for us to relate to their struggles with his narration. The plot is great as well and MayDreamer's self-criticism is a rare pearl any reader should cherish. He pays attention to his story and how he could improve it. However I don't think giving away the character's personal characteristics in one go, even if it's one per chapter, is a good idea. You should use body language or talk about the way they react to the event unfolding. It's the reader's duty to wrap their opinion around the characters of your story, through their acts. From the prologue to the fifth chapter alas, I had a little troubles reading through your typing mistakes (uppercase letter a little random) and it left me a little offbeat. Thanks for your great work so far, I look forward to read the next chapter.

safa_bukhari
safa_bukhariLv2safa_bukhari

it is extraordinary i love 💘 your story. your style is unique. your plot is well organized. you deserve 👏 a big applause. keep it up. well done.