Review Detail of Aeirana in Beneath The Cloudy Sky

I think this story does have a lot of potential. I see the characters are well thought out. But, I do believe that the readers would benefit more from the story if you were to refrain from doing "character info" panels in the chapters. Instead, try to integrate that into the story itself where we can read and understand the characters/world/plot as the story goes on. The info dumps in the chapters make the story kind of clunky and hard to read. I do want to get to know the characters and the world, but it's hard to figure out if one part is the story or the "info". This is my honest opinion. I definitely think you have something solid here and it can definitely be great. There is room for improvement. But very good effort so far!