Reviews of GOT/ASOIAF: A Game of Ice and Fire
GOT/ASOIAF: A Game of Ice and Fire
Daichi_TBR193
- Overall Rate
- Writing Quality
- Updating Stability
- Story Development
- Character Design
- world background
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Writing Quality 3* Not the best but definitely above the webnovel average; readable. Story Development 2* Seems like it's not GoT/ASOIAF are he mc trusts everyone and goes around telling secrets. Character Design 2* the author trust to make him seem manipulative but from all his stupid decisions we can tell he's just naive and foolishly trusting (in his miniscule abilities). Updating Stability 1* if you're here to read consistently just leave the updates were slow a year ago and they're still slow. World Background 2* This author has made the same mistake as most fanfiction authors would. Simply because it's a story that already exist doesn't mean you don't describe this in detail; geography, world powers, territories, culture. (not to mention the works been done for you just head to the wiki) Overall 2.0* However minus 1* Reason: mc tells random that he's from another world for absolutely no reason it's the reason I dropped. New Overall 1* Tips for improvement: Grammar has minimal mistakes, describe the world more it's very important, your character is the type i hate 2nd most the kind who THINKS that they're smart, The pace of the story is too slow when compared to his strength either speed the pace or nerf him both are kinds impossible at this point, Update more and do it consistently.
a long chp, decent eng and structure and a common yet uncommon concept..nice. Prince GOT SI suggestions....dont bring modern technology like gun powder and ****,,,,,,, use technology from the ancient greeks, romans, Egyptians and ****.....use roman cement, that **** is apparently very very durable. Their tactics, Farming, Roads are also good...mandatory to join army or some****. Also metal alloys, to create durable cheap ****. Use runes and carve em onto people and control em with mind [like pain did with magic eye's]...through this make em travel world and MC can build a business using em as an head else where? And he can do this whilst he young cause he isnt going anywhere....I dont think anyone in GOT would allow a child to build business or travel..I realize this is a bit extreme but MC is SI with system... If magic, give it but dont make it common, make it rare, and make MC a warg,,,use insect and birds for advantage......also do u know a manga called' mujang '?, if u do u could use their ' power ' as a power base here, [its normal nothing too un realistic.]...something like Ki but not too unrealistic. Also lions...lion tamer Make MC smart and intelligent,,,dont make him a happy naive retard. Make him like chaotic neutral or just neutral...kind and nice but not a naive hero idiot. Use religion for brain wash and loyalty of public Any relationships just build, dont make MC a pervert and his lover useless sluts, Make em help MC and **** u know. Theres a new GOT SI FF thats very popular and its nice, very nice. BUT its stupid how MC wants to get lover's attention and there no reason for him to [other than political marriage, but in time useless considering MC power] , she is portrayed as extremely useless, avoid this. My point is this, any love interest, make her smart and intelligent u know,,,give a desirable trait other than looking good. **: if lovers moms or wives, could ya warn? not my taste,,,I;d say avoid but it is ur bk
Writing quality, world background, and character design are all really good, however, the updates are extremely slow, as of the recent chapters, the author has had the habit of dragging chapters on with world building, or 'history lessons' as someone as already mentioned in the comments. This has partly ruined it for me, as slow chapters (alot of dialogue or huge 'history lessons') + slow updates can tend to turn alot of people off from reading. I have a feeling this novel would be one of the best ASOIAF FF'S on this website if there were at least 25 chapters. but beside all that, as i said this novel in my opinion is up there with ASOIAF/GOT fan fictions, and i can't wait to read future chapters
Awesome FF dude!👍 And yes! The conjuction of spheres from the Witcher would be a great addition with all the monsters and magic that would come with it! The Mc could become a monster slayer with connections if he could use it to his advantage. Plus, maybe even start his own Witcher school, but because of his status as crown prince that would be difficult. And yes, girls will flock him 😉 se*xual hormones aside, if you could pull it off your story would get a new taste to it different than any other FF. Heck! Maybe even gain titles like the butcher of westeros or kings landing, lord of storms, roaring thunder or whatever! So many possibilities! 😆 And his magic could by lightning or fire because of his heritage! Maybe even add your own semblance of magic to have new tastes like, heromancy (blood magic from skyrim), gravitation magic, blood magic with control like the one from raizel in noblesse Manga, rune magic, etc... and since this is a system fanfic, the Mc could maybe choose jobs like blacksmith or enchanter or rune master to create weapons from myths like gae bolg, exacalibur, or whatever you want! (yes, I admit I'm a nasuverse fan😊 but nothing op like those weapons since they are soooo broken) Sooo many possibilities and scenarios you could choose from! it's your choice though.
