Review Detail of amaturewriter in GOT/ASOIAF: A Game of Ice and Fire
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a long chp, decent eng and structure and a common yet uncommon concept..nice. Prince GOT SI suggestions....dont bring modern technology like gun powder and ****,,,,,,, use technology from the ancient greeks, romans, Egyptians and ****.....use roman cement, that **** is apparently very very durable. Their tactics, Farming, Roads are also good...mandatory to join army or some****. Also metal alloys, to create durable cheap ****. Use runes and carve em onto people and control em with mind [like pain did with magic eye's]...through this make em travel world and MC can build a business using em as an head else where? And he can do this whilst he young cause he isnt going anywhere....I dont think anyone in GOT would allow a child to build business or travel..I realize this is a bit extreme but MC is SI with system... If magic, give it but dont make it common, make it rare, and make MC a warg,,,use insect and birds for advantage......also do u know a manga called' mujang '?, if u do u could use their ' power ' as a power base here, [its normal nothing too un realistic.]...something like Ki but not too unrealistic. Also lions...lion tamer Make MC smart and intelligent,,,dont make him a happy naive retard. Make him like chaotic neutral or just neutral...kind and nice but not a naive hero idiot. Use religion for brain wash and loyalty of public Any relationships just build, dont make MC a pervert and his lover useless sluts, Make em help MC and **** u know. Theres a new GOT SI FF thats very popular and its nice, very nice. BUT its stupid how MC wants to get lover's attention and there no reason for him to [other than political marriage, but in time useless considering MC power] , she is portrayed as extremely useless, avoid this. My point is this, any love interest, make her smart and intelligent u know,,,give a desirable trait other than looking good. **: if lovers moms or wives, could ya warn? not my taste,,,I;d say avoid but it is ur bk
GOT/ASOIAF: A Game of Ice and Fire
Daichi_TBR193
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Dude you’re spoiling the story. 😂 You are a 100% right about the technology stuff. About magic, I was planing to make the MC one of the few people that is aware of the existence of magic (As a matter of fact, it is still returning). Exceptions being warlocks and the likes, but they can’t wield it without serious side effects. I do wish to know what do you think about the witcher concept? (I mean, the conjunction) About love interests, I need to confess something. Despite I tagging this fic as “harem”, it will be more accurate to describe it as multi pairing. Not that the list of relationships will be short or meaningless, but I want to avoid forcing or maintaining ships that shouldn’t last more than “a night” (or some other short period of time.) My priority is to make interesting characters. I will take a look into this story that you have recommended. Like I said before, all suggestions are welcomed! About my MC, I really want to make him the coolest guy ever. Unfortunately, it is more likely that with my tastes he might just turn into an “edge lord” or “easy going guy”. I’m trying my best to flesh him out beyond that. All things considered, you have my gratitude for supporting my work. I will not disappoint such valuable reader! Thanks for the review!
Daichi_TBR193:Dude you’re spoiling the story. 😂 You are a 100% right about the technology stuff. About magic, I was planing to make the MC one of the few people that is aware of the existence of magic (As a matter of fact, it is still returning). Exceptions being warlocks and the likes, but they can’t wield it without serious side effects. I do wish to know what do you think about the witcher concept? (I mean, the conjunction) About love interests, I need to confess something. Despite I tagging this fic as “harem”, it will be more accurate to describe it as multi pairing. Not that the list of relationships will be short or meaningless, but I want to avoid forcing or maintaining ships that shouldn’t last more than “a night” (or some other short period of time.) My priority is to make interesting characters. I will take a look into this story that you have recommended. Like I said before, all suggestions are welcomed! About my MC, I really want to make him the coolest guy ever. Unfortunately, it is more likely that with my tastes he might just turn into an “edge lord” or “easy going guy”. I’m trying my best to flesh him out beyond that. All things considered, you have my gratitude for supporting my work. I will not disappoint such valuable reader! Thanks for the review!