Misleading title and wack author. Dont waste time

Futa/genderbender read at own discretion since author didn’t want to say it in the synopsis 👎

Writing is good and not many mistakes that make it hard to follow, only long paragraphs and small misspellings. Only thing I’d say is a major negative is how dragged the story is- almost 100 chapters just to get to the meeting talked about at the start which was like less than a week away at that point. Makes the story feel stationary.

Feels like a 3rd rate author writing about another 3rd rate author. No real mystery just a confusing tale of a guy brought over to his own novel but doesn’t know sh*t. I’d understand if it was a old novel but he was literally writing about it become the crossover. Also MC is indecisive, one line he’s talking about not caring about going back and a few lines later he wants to go back. Only mystery is the FML but that just feels forced idk if she lived through the novel and came back but still doesn’t explain her knowledge and the MCs lack of basic survival instincts. Not the worst novel but pretty ehh. Might come back to see how author explains why he transmig/ how FML knows about him from his OG world.

Thought the MC would transmig w/ family but the eldrich touch is nice. But a few things I cannot get past is the loss of braincells trying to understand the beginning as the author does nothing to make it make sense and leaves readers at a loss trying to understand. System or status takes up so much space but ok small complaint. Where i had to drop was making the chapter excessively long by describing characters like they’re fukin art masterpieces- I don’t need an essay to know how his family looks. Last but not least- his whore sister. First chapter she’s complaining the MC (before transmig) walking in on her getting screwed by 5 guys, and the failed posioning on him. And what happens later… you guessed it, she’s in the harem. Can’t you just stick with the nice maid or something. Is it really necessary to do all the world building and plotting to have him screw his sister that he literally said ‘is for the streets’? Anyways novels isn’t bad by WebNovel standards just disappointing and at times confusing.

Author deletes bad reviews but heck, it’s a niche novel. Like really niche. Author mixes story with poetry which isn’t bad but with how much he does it and tries using it as a form of comedy brings story down. Also visually looking at all the emojis added to the novel makes it feel like I’m looking at a long string of texts rather than a novel-lame. Don’t get me started on how the plot constantly revolves around MC being screwed over just to drag it out and repeat the next chapter. It’s not horrible like the shitty WN out there just not well executed and appealing or like i said for a very niche group.

Nice story idea just butchered by author themself. Coming into his 2nd life for 18 years mc is cold and isolated even from sister, knows for 8+ years he has low magic and possible healing affinity. When exams comes fire magic is brought out of nowhere, faces one failure in the test and for some reason reminisces of sister. But when he fails the tests and sister is around he’s back to cold, she gives a hug he feels warm, he leaves and is cold again. The author made a 500+ year old person and when he acts abnormally and it’s pointed out by readers the response is -‘he’s emotionally unstable’ (yet the author also claims demons don’t worry/think of emotions) -‘he does what he wants’ (i mean i guess after not doing shit for 18+ years) And when readers criticize half ass reply of “thanks for reading”. Author may be a masochist that’s fine with people spitting on they face but don’t disrespect readers by throwing a hogwash story together that falls apart for anyone with 3+ brain cells.

Read on other websites and stopped to check and see if it was edited here in ch164/165 like claimed but it wasn’t. Idk where the author claimed she made it an illusion or if they just lied to get more readers but MC sets girl and guy up and the girl is extra assertive to prove a point, although they didn’t go all the way, it was cause the guy was a quickshot and passed out (mcs work) but she was more than ready. All-in-all, NTR in those novel chapters, not surprised coming from their other novels so heads up

Only positive thing i can say is the consistency but story wise.. -MC’s setting is he isn’t scared to die, not like a hero sacrificing themself but a person that just gave up on life. -MC also says he’ll do what he wants to live life his way and to the fullest which contradicts his idgaf mindset. Then there’s the weak writing in style, punctuation, and logic. Feels like it goes fast, then slow, then fast again randomly. Also doesn’t help that using audio makes the chapter feel like one long sentence. *niche irk: using “ and ‘ interchangeably when characters talk and not when thinking. It’s like your 100th novel… come on :/

At some point reading you realize the author dumps unnecessary info in between the chapters that just drags it on and on, feels very 1-D in the characters and world. Worst thing is it was a nice premise just turned into a slowly declining story with a conceded MC, face-slapping a culture bs ‘trying’ to get himself out of the situation but as soon as cold wife showed a little concern his last 2 brain cells clock out

Feel like i lost brain cells reading this

Inconsistent. Don’t think author has any vision writing this, claims mc is good in first life so gets second life but kills in the new world and says ‘glad I’m not rusty been a while since I’ve killed? Claims to hate family but meets sister for first time and goes from anger to worried and don’t get started on stretching chapter and what feels like unholy unnecessary filler shit 👎 drop if you plan to read 🫡

Horrible author. Story lacks structure and sense. If you don’t drop by ch5 you prob will before ch10. Honestly don’t think the writer put half a brain cell making this and it shows. Also if you looks at the chapter titles later on it looks like a shit storm of shit storms don’t waste you time, don’t gift anything just let author know it’s time to put down the pen and do some other job since they are not gifted in storytelling in the slightest. Truly and honestly I hope you find something you’re good at and don’t write another chapter for the rest of you life. Respectfully

Story and pass not bad. Decent world build, characters can go from being all over the place or feel 1d like 0-100 which is confusing. The most annoying thing though is too much unnecessary auntie notes/interjections, just be confident that readers can understand. And reduce all the stuff at end of each chapter, really sucks when you have speech on and it drags on endlessly

Trash. Don’t write again. Projecting your inexperience and fantasies with women 🚩 wish your future spouse good luck dealing with you