Hey, my friend. Your character's name is Rayna Max. Her attribute is faith and her property is dexterity. She'll make her appearance in chapter 17. You can read the synopsis of my novel to get a better understanding of attributes and properties.

Thank you so much Allen. I truly do put my all into my novel, and I have so much fun writing it. Thanks again for your honesty.

The story started off really sad with Kim's family losing a cherished loved one. But there was a lot of tension and resentment coming from Ma Jun towards his dad. Feeling that his dad didn't care about his family or didn't love him at all. Although the story was hard to follow at times I'd say what took away from the story was deaths after deaths. So many people died. And I'm not sure why. I get that Kim Shik was betrayed but the reason for being betrayed I still don't get it or I must've read over it. So Hyun at just a young age witnessed so much tragedy. She's practically dead inside. Now it's to the point were she doesn't feel anything. But Yong Chal Just wants a family. Which he though he gained when his mother married Kim Shik. To some extent he did. His happiness was just short lived due to his mother's and Kim Shiks death. This Story has a lot of potential. You just need to focus on your transition in an out of time frames and first second and third person should be better executed. Overall I'll give it 3.5 stars.

This was your best chapter I've read so far in my opinion it shows that Yong Chal just wants a family and that he loves his sister. I was starting to think that So Hyung might be Schizophrenic. I'm not really sure at this point. But over all great chapter.

This is getting out of hand. I guess this is making her into a cold hearted monster. Who will someday get revenge on those who caused her pain.

Everyone is dying and this family is slowly falling apart. And Ma jun wasn't at the funeral. He has no knowledge of what happened.

The description was a little off but I enjoyed the drama.

It's clear that Ma Jun feels abandoned by his father. You can tell he has always had resentment towards his father.

The love he has for his mother and sister are very touching. Even trying to comfort his dad in this time of tragedy while being strong himself shows his strength and true nature of his heart.

The transition between story lines weren't as smooth for me and you should focus more on your first and second person point of view.

I'm going to be honest. The chapter is long and the story was kind of hard to follow. Which makes it kind of dull and difficult to read at times. But the description of the characters were good. And Kim's family saddened by the lost of a loved one is very relatable.

I don't want to say what happened because people still are reading the book. But your absolutely right. They're in for a huge fight.

Thank you so much for your kind words. I can tell you truly loved the novel. And your feel for the characters and plots shows you have strong interest the novel. You great at encouraging people my friend. Your words mean a lot and thanks again.

Just reading chapters 1 through 8 is worthy of 5 stars. A mother wounded from battle carrying her baby in the snow on her back is empowering. And manages to send her daughter through time and get the half key to her sister who was also wounded in battle. And still has love and humility in her heart because she paused before asking those who serve her to give their lives because she didn't have the strength to seal off the half key. Her servants fought admirably against the garbeast. What savages they are. I'm still waiting to find out if they can be killed. And then there's Fenrec. I find it hard to believe that he loves anyone let alone his daughter considering the fact that he played a pivotal role in this war torn world. But then I find out he wasn't being truthful with serentus which made me hate him less. But not even I would have wished such a harsh death on him. That was painful to read. Now the fight scene at the council building was epic. They did their best to fend serentus off. They stuck to their training but his power was to much for them to handle. Serentus is just evilness without a solid form. And why did that young squads man try to attack serentus alone. He gets an a for effort. But fell down dead to the floor dead. I think lump was the word you used. Lol I like it. And then comes my boy Gione and his squad going toe to toe with serentus. It was beams, and force fields, and slowing down movements to avoid attacks. This shown down was fantastic. And Lydia is a f**king badass. I love her. Where does she get her powers from. I was so excited to write this review now I'm saddened thinking about Lydia's death. She died a heroes death. I just hope they can find a way to bring her back in upcoming chapters. This is a masterpiece. Excellent writing. Keep up the good work.

This is getting good.

I could be wrong but I'm starting to think that Fenrec didn't want a war. He was only trying to having a life for him and his daughter. But they didn't have to kill him like that. They treated him like he was less than trash.

A war torn world with a man who's responsible for the war. Is at war with himself. And his dying wish is for his secretary who owes him her life. Raise and look after his daughter. It's selfish yet powerful. Thrilling and mournful.

I love your descriptive writing style. I'm the story is starting to come together. I also like how the build up doesn't take away from the story.

Wow this was dark. For a moment there I was starting to think that Elvis wasn't going to seal off the half key. And I'm wondering. Has anyone ever killed a garbeast before?

I love the intensity of the mother. Doing all she can to save her child. And you capture the background very well. This story is interesting and keeps you wanting to read more. I'm curious to know why they are after the child, who is she, and who were those cloaked men. Very good writing.