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I hate this dmn auto correct. Everything that I have written sounds like a bad grammar sigh, also to add, Raphael mom and mother gave birth to their daughter and son just for a simple purpose 'I am bored with your finger, so give me somebody else to fck me' yup, that is right folks, grooming everyone, grooming
This novel has a very simple plot, Raphael was born by his lesbian mother and mom just for her mom to fcuk him when he grows up lol, and not just that, he also has the 'it is alright for my women to build their Yuri harem as long as my dick is the only thing they will suck' and yes, there is a yuir harem, though I love it the plot seems to stick solely unto those two and nothing more. Worlding building has nothing on it, character development was only received by his sister that he fucked right after, and have a Yuri 4some with her 3 mother's lol, it was hot ngl. And how about the characters then? They are all bland except when they are about to sex but ngl, the sex with Mc sometimes felt like it was done by a 15 year old kid, hope the author will notice that and change it, it is kind of irritating and annoying. It should be only 1 ngl, but as this novel sometimes gets me hard, I'll be giving it 2 As for the writing quality, there are times when the author made a mistake on his/her grammar,not just very often though sometimes consistent, but it wasn't that bad anyway.
Thank you so much for the review, here are my question if it's alright. 1. What do you mean by info dump? Is that those things I added when I introduce a legendary or historical figure? 2. I'm sorry but though I love to make my own set of names, having different words to translate them is much more fun for me, especially when it gives more impact to how it is called compared to english 3. The character development might be slow due to mcs origin, though he lives on his own for 10 years, it didn't apply any ability or insight that is needed in the tower, compared to lucrane who's a veteran on it. 4. Regarding the pacing, I didn't meant it to be slow, just wanted to take some times regarding every floor details and such in a tower, but I'll gladly note your words and find if I could fasten it up a bit, thanks btw 5. And lastly, thanks once again in making a review, your comment will help me find the flows in my story, and it might be tasking but do you have any particular chapter that you find lacking?
Dear author if it will be alright, plss tone down the explanation it's kinda plugging the story, like how you get choke by eating a something delicious so it will be much appreciated. It's alright to give explanation but it's so exaggerating to explain it like an essay And thnx for chap wish for more
Dear author, I hope you will be able to read this review of mine, truly wish. Okay first off, I really intend to only give 2.5 ratings on this one ngl, but as I was amused how you wrote son of the hero king, I'm patient enough to wiat for further development of this one so 3 is just the right rate I could give. I can onky give cons of this one but if you want to hear some pros, onky could be stated "it's fcking good!". First of in the cons, too much blah blah blah author. You can just cut some words there and here and shorten those yada yada yada of Mc like what!? It's like his just talking about frogs but explained it IN 1 WHOLE DMN CHAPTER! plss cut some part of it. One of the most recent one is when his gonna meet his adopted mother. On I need to visit but yada yada yada blah blah blah yeah I need to visit mom but mom is ect etc etc blah blah blah so yeah I'll visit mom, plss author cut those off next chapter or 5he upcoming one. I aint yet a full privilege author but one of Editor told me that excessive words is truly boring. 2nd, change how Mc states how "I dont yet everything about this" sht. It's good he knows, seriously but DMN his like a broken record and like of those mob characters in a "I'm not a mob but blah blah" series, keep stating that his mob like this mob like that he can't do sht cuz his a mob and mob he is like man, plsss, for the love of potato stop it. And lastly, make it 2 chapters everyday!! I want moreeee!!! MOREEEE! and that's all author
Okay let me say this author from the bottom of my heart, goddamn you pull some 360 story with good plot and sh1t! If I have obey and could read all your unlock series I will do so. I started reading this for smut but damn what a twist that all those plot and "plot" gone thicker and thicker every chapter. I wis for more chaps and plss give us a good slap for the upcoming chapter with twist and all
Plot wise it's average but love it, can't wait for more chaps and also except for jasmine, eve, Evelyn and Lena whose are totally not much of a character for me, love rose and aushima so much, Mc is much better than any r-18 ntr master in series I've read before, he ain't an a**hole neither a f*cktard who only wants s*x and no more, love the series and ngl wish you update it 2 chaps a day but that's asking too much so I'll wait
Plss explain, dunno why ya trying to state such claim where this story is basically Mc trying to ntr the protag, plot wise it ain't bad neither good but I love it, can't say that I would like to change your opinion but trying to justify that this one's a garbage and must be avoided is you being childish and totally stupid, sorry to say this it's only most from less people like you hates this so trying to proclaim you are right makes it so much pitiable if you hate it that much don't read it period