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If a Peak John works with a Peak Adolescent, they can become an Initial Veteran. Same thing with Peak Specialists and Peak Fanatics. Thought that was obvious.
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Specters can't make other Specters produce Zephyx, unless it's the Crimson Sea consuming a Specter. Stuff like that only works in games and wish-fulfillment novels. In reality, if it were that easy, everyone would already be doing it.
You think something that is millions of times as strong and fast as a human can't use wind resistance to "swim" around in the air like it's water? "Ah, there I go being real fast, guess I just go to space now." You know, instead of just pushing the air on top of you really quickly like you want to dive into the water? I think a hand moving about 500 kilometers per second upwards could push an object downward pretty easily.
First chapter: A couple of cosmic beings dumping exposition on the reader about how amazing and strong the main character will be some day. Second chapter: Main character as a young boy just running around outside, dumping exposition on the reader. Third chapter: A family feast where the family dumps exposition on the reader about family background and politics. Fourth chapter: MC meets his uncle and flies away with his father, and about 30% or so of the chapter are just descriptions of how the surroundings and the uncle look. In short, more exposition. Fifth chapter: an absolutely enormous wall of text talking about what wind wolves do. We get our first little bit of action, and it's a controlled battle against the wolves while much more powerful people look on. The author's note is the funniest of everything, calling it a "serious battle". It took five chapters to come to anything even remotely interesting with a tiny hook. 6000+ words of exposition about a world no reader cares about yet. Additionally, while the writing style obviously shows a good grasp of english with a varied vocabulary, every single person talks just as "lyrically" and "verbose" as the narrator himself. Take any of the quotes and read them in a vacuum. I promise you, without clues like them naming themselves, you won't be able to guess who says who. The entire thing has the same tone, and you might as well have every character voiced by an AI. That about shows the same personality. All in all, while the grammar, flow, and vocabulary are decent, the novel itself is as stale and mundane as a schoolbook. Might as well read a dictionary. That gives about the same result. 2.2/5
blood loss during the period is not as big as you would expect. The average period only gives off about 50 - 70 ml of blood.
Had to delete the old review since it is no longer completely accurate due to some changes. ----- Welcome to my third novel! I wrote two other novels before this one, Lightning Is the Only Way and Sword God in a World of Magic. This time, I want to go with a darker theme. I want to create a dark world where humanity is not the dominant species, and I want to tell a story about a character that doesn't go as crazy as Shang. There's still darkness going on, but it's not as bad. Naturally, I'm not a guy that writes goody two shoes characters. Killings will take place. However, compared to my last MC, this one won't be as dark. But the darkness of the world will make up for it! Anyway, hope you have fun. Two Chapters per day. Join my Discord: https://discord.gg/EfePH46Aru
There are nine people in total. NIck's team of five and four Veteran guards.
No, the four guards are Veterans.
Thx, changed. Was a typo.