Flower_Something
Personally I give every novel I read a 5-10 chapter read because how can you be expected to develop a story within the first chapter? I found it quite hard to read past the third chapter because of the information overload, there are lots of kingdoms and rulers mentioned in the first chapter that it’s hard to remember who is who. Similarly I’ve noticed that sometimes the author uses the names of people with our establishing who they are which makes reading a bit more difficult. There are a few writing mistakes as well, e.g. using both he and she for hyena interchangeably. The story definitely does have potential, it’s grammar is good and the update speed is noteworthy, I just hope some minor plot holes can be fixed and things can be made clearer.
Sorry for the late review! I finally can review this book. First off, I'd like to start by saying that the author's writing is pretty good imo. The wording of the sentences can still be improved upon though it's still enjoyable enough to be negligible. The plot is solid and we get to see lots of Intervar's thoughts. Though i've only read until chapter 5, but so far so good. If I have to comment on one thing—as this is my personal preference—is the lack of dialogue and the immersion of the novel. Where is Intervar situated exactly? What is Intervar's personality? Although the narration gives enough to explain his thoughts and general location, I would have preferred dialogue to fill that gap in—still, it's just my preference.
I'll keep this short and simple. As someone who is used to reading novels with 1000+ chapters, reading this one was a change. Luckily though, the novel lived up to its interesting description, the writing was good, and the plot was interesting, I have nothing to pick on really Great work author, you didn't disappoint.
There is a bit of information overload at the beginning of the chapter in regards to the kingdoms and rulers. The character Hyena's pronouns switch back and forth and I don't know if that was intentional so it is a little confusing. Other than that the story is very interesting and I am curious about the world so I will continue to read!