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CultivationKing

CultivationKing

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2022-08-06 JoinedGlobal
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  • CultivationKing
    CultivationKing1yr
    Replied to DaoistDoom

    mostly villain

    Ch 19 King of Egypt
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    Deus Ex Machina: Evolution System
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  • CultivationKing
    CultivationKing1yr
    Replied to CultivationKing

    Furthermore, the world is really established even three chapter in. This by itself isn’t really a problem, it’s more so terms and ideas are brought up by the author when we as the readers have no idea what’s going on. Example as In t e continues mention of tails, I assume they’re in some sort of omega verse of furry fic but Im not sure. The mention of kingdoms that don’t exist on earth makes us certain it’s set somewhere is but there are constant omages to it, e.g. cul-de-sac and cars. I wouldn’t mind an info dump here since it would help a lot

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    There Were Two Brothers
    Fantasy · Flower_Something
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  • CultivationKing
    CultivationKing1yr
    Posted

    Personally I give every novel I read a 5-10 chapter read because how can you be expected to develop a story within the first chapter? I found it quite hard to read past the third chapter because of the information overload, there are lots of kingdoms and rulers mentioned in the first chapter that it’s hard to remember who is who. Similarly I’ve noticed that sometimes the author uses the names of people with our establishing who they are which makes reading a bit more difficult. There are a few writing mistakes as well, e.g. using both he and she for hyena interchangeably. The story definitely does have potential, it’s grammar is good and the update speed is noteworthy, I just hope some minor plot holes can be fixed and things can be made clearer.

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    There Were Two Brothers
    Fantasy · Flower_Something
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  • CultivationKing
    CultivationKing1yr
    Replied to Arklainne

    Good job getting on editors choice

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    Ghoul Hunter (Prodigy)
    Fantasy · Arklainne
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  • CultivationKing
    CultivationKing1yr
    Replied to Zerus

    Thanks so much!

    Ch 14 Beginning of an Empire
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    Deus Ex Machina: Evolution System
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  • CultivationKing
    CultivationKing1yr
    Posted

    The story has lots of potential, i like the way it first lets us know about the world and its background and gives us context about the kingdoms and their relations. one thing i think could be worked on a big is grammar, there are places where different words replace ones that the author actually meant to use. this is an easy fix via getting an editor or double checking. but anyways good book and great beginning looking forward to seeing where Alex goes

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    The Tale Of The Worst One
    Fantasy · Sandipan_Dutta_7440
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  • CultivationKing
    CultivationKing1yr
    Posted

    Masterpiece, read if you want a change of pace, story darker than most and mc changes from hesitant to kill to unbothered. Also very enticing fight scenes so read those too probably

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    Deus Ex Machina: Evolution System
    Fantasy · CultivationKing
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  • CultivationKing
    CultivationKing1yr
    Posted

    Honestly, I'm surprised at the stats for this novel, it should have way more views and power stones. Everything for this novel is great whether it's the grammar, characters etc. I like the idea of getting stronger through the game and it reflects irl because it give the players a reason to try so hard.

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    Versatile System Online
    Fantasy · PRO_GAMER_2345
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  • CultivationKing
    CultivationKing1yr
    Posted

    The story looks over interesting and promising, I like the idea of Mr Smiley and his world domination. The world-building is amazing but I feel you could go into more depth when describing the character's appearances, me smiley was done perfectly but his fall maid was kind of not. Also grammar is good and no errors

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    SK Domination: Ignis Fatuus
    Sci-fi · MisterEnd
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  • CultivationKing
    CultivationKing1yr
    Posted

    This is going to be hard to review because I can’t really pinpoint anything they’ve done specifically well because it’s all top notch, really the grammar and descriptions are scarily good they make me feel insecure.

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  • CultivationKing
    CultivationKing1yr
    Posted

    Very good story! Gripping intro and very nice flow of conversation. Rameez is a likeable character that I can kinda relate to. The interactions between characters is my favourite part of the novel.

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    Living in the past
    Action · Zeton
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  • CultivationKing
    CultivationKing1yr
    Commented

    At least he gave him an option?

    "I'll be back, whether you die or not does not matter, so do what you want" he said before closing the door, leaving Mobn by himself, as he started to feel a rising pain thoughout his whole body.
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    Heresy
    Fantasy · Ready_
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  • CultivationKing
    CultivationKing1yr
    Commented

    Skin...

    Mobn was unable to recognise the place he was in, the room was well illuminated by artificial light, no windows were to be seen, if there were they had been covered by what Mobn assumed to be skin that covered the walls, ceiling and ground of the room, he had faintly nourrished the hope that it was animals or monsters hide but seeing the shape of a human face on his right crushed the meagre hope.
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    Heresy
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  • CultivationKing
    CultivationKing1yr
    Commented

    This is actually scary

    "Listen here you dipshit, I don't have all night, I don't need you to tell me nor do I need concrete proof to know that you are fucking snitch" spoke Vlasfimia in an eerily calm tone, for most of it at least.
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    Heresy
    Fantasy · Ready_
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  • CultivationKing
    CultivationKing1yr
    Replied to VenerableDemon

    No harem! I think having one girl is much more wholesome and better in general

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    Deus Ex Machina: Evolution System
    Fantasy · CultivationKing
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  • CultivationKing
    CultivationKing1yr
    Replied to Jitna

    Thanks for highlighting the mistake

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    Deus Ex Machina: Evolution System
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  • CultivationKing
    CultivationKing1yr
    Posted

    Pretty interesting story idea... Likeable characters and beautiful descriptions that make me feel like I'm the mc. Need to read this if your haven already

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    Mr. CEO Love Me Till I Say No
    Urban · Riyaa_A
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  • CultivationKing
    CultivationKing1yr
    Posted

    Perfectly done, nothing is lacking when it comes to this novel. Above all the description and grammar is wonderful there are quite literally no mistakes. It make me, the reader feel like I'm inside the novel

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    Ghoul Hunter (Prodigy)
    Fantasy · Arklainne
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  • CultivationKing
    CultivationKing1yr
    Posted

    My first novel on this website, I have full confidence it's 5-star worthy if you're curious and weren't sure whether or not to check it out please do, it would help me out a lot!

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    Deus Ex Machina: Evolution System
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  • CultivationKing
    CultivationKing1yr
    Replied to InHisName

    Innocent lives refer to the two women who were frozen in fear, lamenting about how he essentially murdered two people who couldn't fight back.

    Ch 4 Instinct
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    Deus Ex Machina: Evolution System
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