Reviews of The Lust System

Hello Again! I read my last review, and it was too long so I've decided to change it. This is the first novel that I've written, and you will see a lot of things that you might not like. I will just say that I will try to write better every day. Next would be, if you are reading this, just enjoy the novel. If you're fine with it, continue reading and vote for the novel with Power Stones! If you don't like it, find other novels that you like or maybe DM me on discord for your suggestions/corrections. ==================== My website where you can read my latest chapters: Elfriedenn.home.blog There are around five free chapters available in there! If you want to read more than 15 Locked Advance Chapters in my website, you can find the Password on my Patreón: Patreón.com/Elfriedenn Note: Please read the tags in the description before reading. There are incest, rape, and many more tags in there. In case you get magically surprised, not expecting it. Discord: http://discord.gg/PdgErwK (If you have good suggestions and stuff, join here! Talking about how they hate the incest in my novel and useless things like that will be kicked from the group)

MC: “do you want sum fuk?” Beautiful lady: “Yes.” Thus, they had sum fuk. ........ ........ ........ ........ ........ ........ ........ ........

I really want to add this Original to my library to read later when there are a bunch of chapters compiled, but I'm so scared someone will see my phone and catch a site of the cover ='( lol. I don't have the guts for that, so let's hope I can find this novel again in a while when there are more chapters.

Very very very........ Bad...... I don't know about other..... But it's not nice for me...... Just think of it.... It's feel like..... SHIT.... Raping is one of most things I hate it..... If MC had sex with girl..... With their permission. I will not have problem.... But..... Rape.... Damn..... And even with his own sister..... Okay I will say.... Okay to incest.... If she love to him and do it with him. But.... No. MC is SHIT.... Who? Fuck girl without there conscious about it.

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This novel is written by a middle schooler. The plot is really dumb and keeps getting dumber as the story goes on, even hentai has plot that makes more sense than this. The authors attempts at fixing his protagonist with self-analysis monologues completely ruins the novel, instead of showing character development he just gives ****ty monologues (such as when he talks about being picky with his women but also he randomly rapes girls in the starting 10 chapters). The fact that his entire family knows about the system and that there's "another side of society" that the MC doesn't know about is also retarded. This should have stayed as a lust novel, sadly it's spiraling into random autism.

Actually the only great things on this Novel was that the usefulness of the system. As for the MC ? He's dumb, stupid, narcissist. And the most worst thing in this Novel was that the MC told his sister about the existence of the system. No matter what it is, you can't tell someone about something that is important for you to life. You said what ? For the trust to be more stronger ? Bull****!! Even his sister wasn't trust him at all. And for here, I already know that the MC, despite of what he have, deep down he is still a loser. He can't even manage his own to the point his sister did that for him. (It showed after he told his sister about the system.) A lot of System Novel lose their reader because of some bull**** reasons to use as an excuse for the MC to reveal his System. The only one that isn't fall under this category as far as I knew was that Novel with the title "Bringing Farm to Another World" As for this one ? Well, some Bull**** reason. There's no situation to force the MC to reveal his system yet he reveal it on his own Will. Oh no that wasn't his will, but he is ordered by the System to reveal his System. LOL

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Great job. I like your main character so far and is lack of morals lol. Keep up the good work and I look forward to more updates. You need like a childhood friend conquer or Maybe an accidental trap encounter could be funny.

This is basically Bill Cosby's autobiography. 50% Rape 50% Drugs 100% dafuq ......................................... 140 characters .............................................

Warning to those about to read this, the novel is poor of quality for many reasons. One. It's one of the many '**** cultivation' novels that's starting to become popular. Its nothing but cringe-worthy writing revolved around sex, rather than the story. Two. "For the future readers of my novel, please give this novel a chance. I don’t know how many chapters will be released when you read this but this novel will potentially reach 1000+ chapters. If I can reach that time without being broke." That automatically tells us that this will be dropped soon, forcefully dragged or just a terrible novel.

Go ahead, my little grasshopper.

You know, Its kinda annoying when you meet 10 yr old fucking idiots that complain about not knowing how to read properly, and then complain because they cant read the tags, complaining that 'The story isn't progressing its just focused around ***' IT IS A FUCKING HENTAI NOVEL YOU DON'T EVEN HAVE TO READ THE TAGS JUST READ THE FUCKING TITLE Holy shit man

Story: So-so R-18: Mild World Building: Alright Character Building: Not too bad Plot: All over the place. MC: ... If I have to describe it. At the moment, he is like a baby that has been given a gun. He scared people, but can never kill them. He has a strongest skill, but he can't even make use of it right. He is dumb and no matter how much he justify his reason, his next couple of action just contradicts everything. In short, an MC that should be dead already, if not for the Author's Plot Armor. MC Harem: Easy To all of them Common Sense doesn't exist. Overall, it's a novel that you might want to read just to read it.

You seem completely ignorant of how to deal with social interactions. Your dialogue, your character reasoning, your responses and everything just reeks of a basement dweller too far removed from reality. Your story could benefit a lot from you being less awkward and creepy and more realistic and in control. The general writing style is *******ish to the extreme and seemingly every "clever" solution your main character comes up with is incredibly inane. I really don't know what to think of you, especially considering the fact that you seem to actually think this is a good story. Work hard on your basics—very hard—then try again, because this is extremely poor quality writing.

Very promising novel, lots of interesting ideas that have a lot of potential. Looking forward to what the author will write. Courage and keep doing a good work!

THE MC RECOGNIZES HIS MISTAKES AND IS WILLING TO ACCEPT IT. IN THE PAST HE IS IMPATIENT AFTER A FEW CHAPTERS HE TAKES ADVICES. OVERALL A GREAT NOVEL TO SPEND TIME :)))

Just see the title and cover I know this is a good story...... Hohohohohohohohohohohohohohohohohohohohohohohoho..............,,……….………………………,,……………….................................... ..... ..................... .........................................

I can proudly say... I read this for the plot. This story is a great one, the author is a genius at building up the story's development as this is truly a work of art. Each chapter leaves the readers pining for more with hard c*cks and wet p*ssies, read this and you won't regret it.

1. Lust system is forgotten after 100chaps and MC doesnt bother doing missions anymore 2. MC is supposedly possessive but forgets about few he raped bcz he cant be bothered 3. MC is a total asshole who rapes women with his skills 4. 80% of the novel is filler and about random thoughts that are explanations of explanations 5. MC’s initial goals to create a harem forgotten and tries to become strong