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Yeah, this is of course based on the first two chapters, but in my experience the start is generally a very good indicator of the rest of the story, as it should be. If these kind of characters are what you actually aimed for, then some of it is just a case of differing tastes, I suppose, though I don't feel like that's entirely accurate.
It's a cringy mess with completely over-the-top and childish character behavior that constantly break any sort of immersion. No character in the story has even come close to actual human behavior so far, and that never bodes well for a story. Narration and descriptions are weak, but not as bad as the characters, and the plot seems to steer heavily into over-the-top unfunny comedy and coincidences. It's just not good. I don't know if you've improved since you started writing this story, but if you take a look at these chapters now, can you really, honestly say that you think this is worth reading? I'm not surprised it has a bunch of views in a place like webnovel though, but that does not indicate any sort of quality. I apologize if this comes as a surprise, though I'm guessing you'll dismiss it as 'trolling' or whatever, as is often the case. Either way, it doesn't seem like it'll be worth reading any further, so good luck with your writing.
Yeah, I write too and that's part of why I understand how incredibly important these beginning chapters are. In my opinion, rather delay the new chapters a little bit and spend the effort making the beginning readable. Different people will have different priorities and goals though, just giving my view of how you came off here.
That's because you're misunderstanding what most mean when they say this. Something can be fantastical yet still realistic, in the sense that the rules the author sets up for his magic are kept throughout the story and not just thrown in whenever they feel like it without any regard for the structure or expectations behind it. What I meant by unrealistic characters in this case is that the people in the story simply do not act like actual people would, even given their living in a magical world and positioned where they are. If characters don't act, speak, respond and generally are made to feel at least somewhat real, in relation to our own idea of what people are like, it becomes jarring and drags you out of the immersion of the story. And of course you can create a character who stays calm while killing people, while being ordered by a demon to kill people, and make it feel realistic. Plenty of such people exist today, just replace "demon" with more real-world things. It's not meant as if dragons, magic and flying ships should be removed in order for a fantasy story to feel realistic, just that the logic behind them should be consistent and at least somewhat thought out. Ideally to the point where the reader can feel like a part of the world and understand the options and limitations.
MC keeps putting himself in idiotic situations where he is essentially dead, except some unforeseen person keeps popping out to save him (not planned by the MC, who is always a second from actually dying like a dog) which leads to the MC getting a powerup and repeating the idiocy all over again. The novel as a whole is like 80% filler with random people discussing events in terrible, fake dialogue and the author re-explaing everything that happens 2-3 times to waste as many words as possible. A very low quality story.
No one's harrassing anyone here, buddy. Whether it's free or not really doesn't matter. He chose to post his work online on a place with a review system in place and he intentionally manipulates those reviews to make his story look better than it is. The reviews are not just for the author to improve his writing, it is also (and I'd argue, mainly) for the potential readers clicking the story so they can know what to expect and decide whether it is worth it for them to spend time on the story. He's not a victim of some great crime here. Don't post things online if you can't handle criticism.