kuhaku_sora
just amazing. Author you got a brilliant mind to come up with such a idea. many do write stories or novel with the genre game but man this is unique. I don't think I found a single mistake at any place. It's just such an amazing read. I loved it .💞💞💞💞💞 and the author keeps updating it on a daily basis. that's even more awesome. keep it up.
I have completed the first chapter, and I swear to you, I am definitely going to read more. Unfortunately, It's late and I need to go to bed, but I wanna get this review out while all this info is in my head. Plot: 9.5/10 Really intriguing plot. I'm new to Webnovel, so I don't know how unique it is, but I have watched and played stories similar. Which is totally not a bad thing at all. If anything, it made me enjoy the story a whole lot more. Knowing some of the source material gave me deeper understandings of the characters and their motivations. The only reason I'm giving a 9.5 is because at some points the story is very explain-y, if that makes any sense. There was a lot of info given at one time. I mostly retained the information, but there were times I had to go back and read it to understand what was happening. Characters: 10/10 Really intriguing characters. There are times I read books on this website, and I completely forget the cast and who they're supposed to be. And with the lack of much dialogue in this one, I assumed the character's would be forgettable. But they weren't. Part of this is the interesting names you gave them. Red RIding Hood, or Red, and Clementine are a few example. The lines they do have are memorable and intriguing. World: 11/10 This was my absolute favorite part about your story. I really felt immersed in the world you tried to build. Like, really immersed. The setting was relatable, because everyone has seen shows with Kingdoms and villages and stuff like that. And the whole Virtual Reality aspect added depth to the setting. Overall, this is a great story. I really wanna read more. There were a few minor errors, but they really don't reflect the author or their style at all. That's all they are, tiny mistakes. And I see that you're competing for the Webnovel Spirity Awards. This definitely deserves one of the top spots. And I'm saying that even though I'm technically supposed to be competing against you, lol. Keep up the good work!
I was hooked from the first chapters. Well to be honest I was hooked from the synopsis 🤣 I think the idea is very interesting. Reading a story from an NPC's perspective instead of a player that goes inside a game is soooo new, at least to me. So I am having loads of fun with it. The writing quality is really good and I think you have a good style. Your descriptions manage to pull at my heartstrings from time to time, making the story even more enjoyable. It's nice and gripping! Keep up the good work! 🥰
This is my first time reading a story like this and not gonna lie, i really like it! It got me interested in the story as soon as i read the first part of the story! I like how detailed the story was and the grammer and words used are superb. Even the title is nice, it attracts readers to read! I hope to see more of the story, it was a amazing read!! I’ll save this in my library and wait for the updates of it!! ✨✨[img=recommend]
The novel is very easy to read with good flow and pacing. Though a lot of people may think the concept isn’t entirely unique, it’s executed much better than majority of any other similar novels. The MC is refreshing and the world building is done beautifully, without it feeling like too much. I hope to read more soon.
The author makes great use of descriptions and adjectives and their grammar is generally very good. However, I was able to spot a few elements of inconsistent grammar, and at one point I was able to point it out via the comment section. The author has lots of potential and I wish them all the best in the future :)
This story hits all the button. Great writing quality and world building. You can clearly see it playing out like a movie. The main character is compelling and has both internal and external conflicts that are portrayed pretty early on. Updates are stable too. I will keep this story in my collection. Thank you, author!! Keep writing. <3
So far I am loving the concept. And the title is catchy too. I love how you stitch everything together to make complete sense. It's just a suggestion, maybe break down the chapters more? It just makes readers feel more satisfied with themselves when they read more chapters if that makes sense. Keep writing! I am so proud of you!!!
It was my first time reading a story with such a concept, and surprisingly I didn't dislike it. The plot is so thoughtfully weaved, with mystery and adventure. There is a thrill in reading this story. Writing quality is first class with impeccable grammar and content with good readability. I came across some terms for the first time which I found a little hard to understand, but still it didn't hinder me understanding what's happening in the story and that's something I really liked. BTW, that quote in your summary. It sounds nice, could you please share what it means or implies, I didn't quite understand.
I'm not a huge fan of fairy tales, but the author takes great pains to take something we think we all know about and rewrite it. It's actually brilliant, and the writing is really smooth! The action is immediate, and the world building happens alongside the fun, so there's very little downtime. On the edge of my seat!
The premise itself is not exactly unique, but it's a fresh and unique take on it and I appreciate that the writer didn't rely on the traditional twist of the genre. It's also an interesting choice of main character who wouldn't normally be expected to be much of a fighter. I'm not a huge fan of using characters heavily inspired of other stories, but it isn't executed distastefully and the characters have depth beyond the established narrative so no further complaints on that! The grammar could use some work, but beyond that a solid start to an intersting story!
Woah I love the concept of this story! Its the fiirst time I've seen an NPC being aware that they are inside a game. The fighting scenes were also vividly described and I could imagine every scene playing out in my head while I read the story. The character development is also slow and steady and the world development follows a clear trajectory. The only flaw I've found so far is use of tenses in the story, especially in the first few chapters, though it does improve in the later ones. Author sama, I believe that if you can go through those chapters again and ensure consistency of the tenses instead of constantly switching between past and present tense, your story would rise by another level! Look forward to seeing more!
If you love playing RPG and looking for adventure , gore content, quests and cool VR stuffs equipped with modern technology, this novel is just for you. You would seep into the story just by starting to read and would actually feel that you are on an adventure ahead. The descriptions and holograms are so vivid that I could imagine it effortlessly. Author has done a great job in bringing out the world , lively and interactive with its elements. Throughout the journey there is sorrow, pain, excitement and unknown road ahead with our NPC FL. I won't trip you by spoiling everything here :) Read it and you will enjoy the world on your own. Updates are quite stable and the book itself has a lot of potential. Language is quite clear and the story is well written. I can clearly see author's thorough knowledge and research on this topic. Can't wait for the story blow up! Once again hat's off to you author 😊.