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The novel is a work in progress. The story is very straight forward and attracts readers easily. The character Design is not generic like others you may find on this site. The gradual errors can easily be shrugged of because the story is worth it! It's a original idea, Keep it up author five stars from me 😊
WOW SO COOL STORY!!! I really loved it. The writing style is so good and clear to understand. The beginning of the story is too attractive that it shows the potential of the author how great he will take it. I give it five stars. it's really awesome. Please keep it now. We want to see who will win and how? KEEP going you can do it
TLDR; The plot is nice, it's a girl power fantasy adventure, and the plot line seems to be moving in a fairly dark and dramatic direction. If you are alright with being patient in waiting for a more concrete world building outline and can overlook a certain amount of grammar issues, it's honestly worth a try for younger readers. The character descriptions are very appearance focused, which I find unfortunate, and it takes me a good couple of lines of dialogue to really sus out their personalities, other than the protagonist who is unequivocally headstrong, impulsive and stubborn in the "strong martial arts FL" kind of way. The writing quality varies quite a bit, and the formatting changes between early and later chapters (I would recommend changing the earlier ones to match the later ones, since the author seems more comfortable with it). There are also a good deal of spelling errors, but getting a decent reading experience regardless is absolutely possible, especially if one reads fast and likes a fast paced story like this one. The competition is fairly outlined, but it gets a little confusing everyone being equally casual with each other as well as the very different names, namely Japanese, Korean, some Eurocentric ones (French and English specifically, I believe), and more. The universe is a little confusing so far, but the focused plot does help with it quite a bit.
First of all, the synopsis attracted me to read the story, and it’s a genre that i like (magic/mystery/royalty) and I recommend it to anyone who likes these genres too. The way the story/characters are set up draws me in. Although there are only a few chapters now, I look forward to reading more. Keep up the good work!
An interesting take on Royals and competition as Ryoko takes over her brother's role. Love the twist in the third chapter. I think if the story is fleshed out a little bit, it would attract more readers. On a side note, I would advise you to proofread your work. Some errors could be fixed which may enhance the reading experience. All the best🥳
There are not many chapters uploaded but what l came to know after reading those few chapters are that its a very great book with a lots of interesting plot..... Every moment here gonna give u a thrilling and attracting vibes.... Really liked the authors writting skills.... Loved the way author wrote the story like not too described but easy to read which readers need the most.... Very cool story l want to say....
I like the concept of this novel and after reading the first few chapters, I think the execution has been great. There could be some work on editing overall, with grammar and so on but it isn't a big deal since everything is easy to understand. I'm excited to learn more about the characters and can't wait for more chapters!
I only read few chapters but i really enjoyed it. There were few grammatical errors in the chapters but i understand it. It happened to me too. The FML ryoko is very interesting character. I don't know much about her but she sounds brave that's why i like it. The world building is also slowly opening. I can't wait to read further. All the best author 😊