Zherie17
I am an aspiring, ugly and poor fiction writer who loves arts, literature and anime from the Philippines.
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Divide the longer paragraphs into two.
Thank you for reviewing mine. So, here is mine to yours. Story wise, it has an amazing plot though: 1. Grammar control needs to be rechecked since punctuation marks are all over the place. 2. You could revise add a prologue to make an interesting impact/impression to attract readers. So far, that is all. Again, thank you and best of luck to you.
"I, Lydia, walked towards the table...."
Thank you for reviewing mine. So, here is mine to yours. Story wise, it has an interesting plot though: 1. Starting by a POV for the first chapters is a bit boring for me. 2. Good language control. 3. You could revise the first chapters to make an interesting impact/impression to attract readers. Again, thank you and best of luck to you.
Thank you for reviewing mine. So, here is mine to yours, 1, Story wise, it has an interesting plot for a stranger like me, though change/edit the long title since it does not actually captivated my attention. 2. In my opinion, the shorter the title and more concise the better. 3. Grammar wise, consult an editor for that. Thank you.
change the phrasing on this one.