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I had expected something good after author's last novel 'stealing heroine' one but this novel was a dissapointment i won't say anything about bad grammar but novel was full of lines trying to evoke a comedic atmosphere though it wasn't able to do it. and there are other things but i ain't gonna type anymore
I do love dungeon master novels and am happy you chose the genre that said either people are stupid or reading the wrong novel cause this doesnt even deserve 1 star. Mc is naive, extremely stupid to the point its cringe, and a massive hypocrite. Could barely go past chapter 3. 1. How has he never injured himself in the cave hes visited for years. 2. His love for an orphanage that took him in because its the literal job of the orphanage is cringe and to the point of fanatic that its unrealistic, sure maybe they were super nice but its their job. ok sure this isnt that bad but its annoying and cringe as heck to see him beg for some money and cry like a baby cause he apparently "needs to support his orphanage" which is literally government funded and he should be paying for food and rent which is a much better excuse cause thats not how a normal person would react or pay their debt its stupid. 3. Grammar is eh 4. Mc is hypocrite, kills wolfs, sees wolf leader has kid, so kills their enemies to protect wolf leader. why? because he has a kid?!?! One, the wolf leader and you were enemies until the second you saw they had a kid and the enemies you kill have kids also you oaf and you have no relation to either party, completely forced by author. 5. I hate harems, but i wont let that affect my review because thats a category not a writing flaw. However why do you people need to ruin novels with dungeon masters and recruiting so much, if you want a harem thats fine, but not almost every single monster recruited needs to be a girl for the sake of harem, throw some guys in that arent antagonists or extras. For those who love harems, thats your choice but i will say its better to not put a harem in a novel as a majority of the webnovel readerbase hates anything harem related and most of those who read harems still read books without harems so if you want more readers dont do harem or little sisters. Little sisters makes 90% of readers drop a novel just seeing any words that state mc has a little sister those that stay just hope she dies so they can read in peace. 6. theres more but im too lazy.
only read about 24 chapters so far as of this review but idk man I've thought about dropping this story a few times now, story itself is pretty good, nothing too amazing but a good read with deferent pacing. My real problem with it is that yes it has the stupid obvious plot armor that we all have come to expect from the novels on this site but what's really getting to me is that not only does author introduce language specific terms from a handful of languages like chaebol (Korean) and nii (Japanese) among a few others, grammar is just as all over the place. wish author would just stick to one or two languages and focus on Grammer, I'm gonna be surprised if I make it to ch.100 lol My advice to author really is to reduce the amount of languages and focus on Grammer
I really liked this story. It draws you in as you read it. The flow of the story is very nice. And the storytelling is very clean. Congratulations to the author, this story made me laugh and kept me reading non-stop. It was never boring and it was enjoyable. It was a pretty good story. Congratulations again
the story concept is interresting, the world around it could use some more work, the romance ... are man really this dense? or did i just oversee the dense protadonist tag? the romance also makes me feel like the mc is somehow gay or stuck at the age of 10 mentally. even the children have more EQ then him. just looking at his dungeon name. how can he not relayse till now what a morningwood is?? leaves me with the question: what did he do at school, because in todays society even they know. sadly the only thing keeping me going for now was the interesting farming concept. to the autor, don't let my critice put you down. i belive with more work you will surly get better over time. just use the readers view to better yourself, every start is hard. but also do not allow everything we write to you, its your story and your idea. put warning in the prologe this way no one can complaine to you later for ignoring them. best wishes and continue writing ps english is not my native languagr so please excuse the mistakes. thanks
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I very much disliked this but only because I dislike cheating and harem. I am very faithful and prefer a single partner. The reason I tried this out, is because the app recommended this to me so I am hoping that writing a review will let the app understand that I don't actually like this. If you like this novel, I can only be happy for you. Finding something you like is precious and I in no way want to make you feel like this novel is straight up bad as my view is subjective. To sum it up, I did not enjoy this personally and I wish you all the best!