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I think the excuse you gave for the mc was a litle too unimaginative when everyone read in know you're simple forving mc to be slider so he can falow the plot. And while I'm happy about this site having more fanfiction of yugioh gx I noted that it's extremely cliche and repeated scene of mc participating in the exams with the peanut gallery commenting, to the point I thought it's was one I already read before.you could simple skipped the peanut gallery dialogue. Other minor things I noticed and breaker a litle of the immersion is that sometimes you suddenly go from first pov to third. And you switching quick-spell card for speed spell card that is from yugioh 5ds
Other than the grammar the fic is trash. For some reason mc want to go on a goose Chase and find a way to go back to his world even if he is in a extremely low fantasy world, already passed countless years and can't forget he have another body. Chance is that if he go back everyone will be dead already. And the worst of it is that auhtor don't make mc think about any of these questions, nor author explain why mc reached the logic that he have a chance to go back. In the end a fic that synopses make you want to read but 2 chapter already want to make you rage quit by how frustanting and lack in details it is
For some reason the supposed god don't expect for some lowly mortal to simple exploit the loophole like mc and make a wish that give him many power, the more ridiculous thing is to see this god permitting mc negotiate to what powers he can have. What's is worse is the excuse auhtor give is straigh up trash. To make things worse we have other reincarnator
For some reason even with mc have white beard powers and potential author decide to give mc the super soldier serum. As for why, author simple don't give a reason
Author destroyed the fic by making 2 mook villain being able to attack the house of the number 2 hero. You know how much stupid this is? Even worse when mc parents that are endeavor best friend are at the forefron in security technology, man this is in the top 10 mos stupid moment in fic I ever see. Anothe thing that make this fic so bad is author giving mc a extremely ok quirk in a low level world like mha
... wow you really know how to destroy a fic huh
First chapter alone start with a huge plot hole showing how much thought auhtor really put into this. Robbers try to steal from a ANIME store this don't even make sense why woul somoene do that, and worst these robber have guns in a country where no even the police have guns, by this first chapter alone you can see how brainless this fic is
Mc could make a pokemon game where after player make a special mission with porygon the digital world of digimon is added to the equation. It can even have other games appear because exist pokemon with the power to open portals to other universes. Porygo-z itself is mentioned in the pokedex to be able to shut through dimensions