Review Detail of Bierbart in Loner in Danmachi
Review detail
Languagewise its rather well written. Some slight errors with the grammar or vocabulary in some parts. For the character design and world development thats the bad parts. The story description is rather faulty definitionwise since he is not really a transmigrator or reincarnator. its a fused soul between a native and the said loner. Hoped for a better MC with thr highIQ tag and the villain tag but the MC is a rather impulsive idiot at least till chapter 18 which is the newest. Also the MC is a literal slave to a ROB and the system even if he was forced into it plotwise its still a slave MC with a faulty system since the description doesnt fit with his impulsive and forced behavior in some parts.(MC behaves like a dumb shounen MC mostly)(example is a quest to reach floor 4 in the dungeon. It never said first dive or on the first day. there was also no time limit and he still forces himself there for little reason first try and nearly died for it and monologued some shounenBS while at it) update stability seems quite good with one short-medium chapter a day.
Loner in Danmachi
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Darkness_Enjoyer:I wrote it like that and explained it in the next chapters, even though one is smart doesn't mean they can't make any mistakes. The High IQ shows he is learning faster and better than other people, and normally speaking, the dungeon's spawn rate at that floor was unreasonable. So, I don't think anyone could predict something like that, and I will explain why it was like that in the novel later. I don't know what you expected from the tags, but if I disappointed you, there is nothing I can say.
I wrote it like that and explained it in the next chapters, even though one is smart doesn't mean they can't make any mistakes. The High IQ shows he is learning faster and better than other people, and normally speaking, the dungeon's spawn rate at that floor was unreasonable. So, I don't think anyone could predict something like that, and I will explain why it was like that in the novel later. I don't know what you expected from the tags, but if I disappointed you, there is nothing I can say.
This review is mostly accurate. The emotionally immature and impulsive mc wasn’t a wise decision. It’s hard to retain readers when they have to withstand 20+ chapters of irritation. In terms of writing, other than cleaning up the writing and writing clearly, the author is doing fine. This story is either a hit or miss depending on if you like the character.
Darkness_Enjoyer:I wrote it like that and explained it in the next chapters, even though one is smart doesn't mean they can't make any mistakes. The High IQ shows he is learning faster and better than other people, and normally speaking, the dungeon's spawn rate at that floor was unreasonable. So, I don't think anyone could predict something like that, and I will explain why it was like that in the novel later. I don't know what you expected from the tags, but if I disappointed you, there is nothing I can say.
I disagree to that ...in the same chapter mc explains why the adventures die due to accumulated fatigue without combat experience and he boasts he his otherself has combat experience....but he does the same mistake and nearly not die due to plot armor (author)...😋
Darkness_Enjoyer:I wrote it like that and explained it in the next chapters, even though one is smart doesn't mean they can't make any mistakes. The High IQ shows he is learning faster and better than other people, and normally speaking, the dungeon's spawn rate at that floor was unreasonable. So, I don't think anyone could predict something like that, and I will explain why it was like that in the novel later. I don't know what you expected from the tags, but if I disappointed you, there is nothing I can say.
