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The story has a interesting and unique concept that can be expanded if the world is described in more detail and the characters at some point were given names because in my own opinion. The way the characters are described is a good outline for later on to give them more information on why they are there. The pacing in the story is good and I am interested in what comes next
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From the chapters I have read I have enjoyed the story so far. The pace is good and the description of the character and the way the react to the things that happen around then sounds realistic and believable. The story is well written and is readable overall I would keep a eye on this story to see how it progress in the future
From what I have read the first chapter creates a good foundation for the story to be built up upon. The characters are described well. But at least for me the description of the world itself should be flushed out more. The first chapter sets up several intriguing story pieces as the parents and the experiment the MC went. It would befit the story in saying it's in the future this would give more creative freedom to work with more sci fi ideas and concepts that may befit your overall story like alien races, planets or other kinds of things that would give your story a more distinctive feel. But i think it's a good story and we'll be sure to keep up with it
I enjoyed the book so far and it describes the characters very good and is well written. I am interested in what is happening but one thing I am wondering is why is this happening to him? What is the MC's motivation? Is he going to use this new power to save the world or has a ancient evil arson? Why did those men want to sacrifice him. The book is good but needs more detail on what your characters needs, wants and the motivation that will drive the rest of the plot I will still read this book to see how things progress