You should read your translations.I am not even talking about chineeese elements but you are making Mistakes in names even once he is jack once he is Ting ye .Also an orphnanage named wu in London of all Places is kinda dumb like these are minor things that should be first to be changed

I just want to tell you something pal.I got your back.This is amazing I have been searching for crossover between two franchises .There was one but its Minor .I wanted to write Myself but I am a trashy author and cannot dedicate to much time on that .I love the beginning although there are some mistakes but you will improve over time. I just cant imahine what interactions will be like too lany possibilities .

Do you clearly see what hapoens when you just jump before not knowing ? If you understood what I said in first should these stupid argument gone furthur? Look to ypur first reply I asked about the exact same thing of why would you refer to her like that which I assumed was you having mis spleed pronouns because she is knows as she by Church people. How my asking of that gone to me liking Gabriel I have no idea . Clearly read comments in it My problem was simple You are making the characters OC and indeed fanfic doesnot need to follow canon but changing some aspects makes DXD fic pointless let me give you an example there are many fics of making the story characters oc but the core stays within their oc ness . Even you act as Asia it will seen through in first glance.Lets not even talk about that but You can clearly see yourself if you are follower All your characters have turned oc and nothing except their names and places mentioned will make people think this is DXD fic .

Oh My God your brain is dull right ? Its not about you making her dude .Its about why are ypu writing her as Lord when clearly she is already depicted female .I was talking about you addressing someone as Lord who is clearly as she.Do you understand what I said ? I said why are you writing lord for Gabriel and even asked you that are going to call Asia lord as well. Read the lines .Does this mean I said you made Somone male nooo dude I mean clearly Someone should read amd see what really I talked about and where you are taking this . I mean really .Pointing out your mistakes in the story is a mistake. You didnot even understand what I said just going making assumptions man this is so funny .

Really? Is this far your mind goes ? Its not about me liking Gabriel I just said that you excuse was ridiculous about it saying that you based that from Bible and all you got is I like gabriel ..I can clearly see where your thinking level is .Read the comment properly .Its not even about Gabriel .If you read it and try to ubderstand it properly then perhaps you can understand something. .

And how exactly is she staying with them and acting is being cautios? If she has Her system .Should she not first think of how to hide instead of showing innocent eyes to fallen angels and Griselda.And fine lets stay with your story but Why is she overthinking and doing nothing You know what I give up .As writing synipsis is the excuse that the story can be great or shitty because you wrote in synopsis so people should leave you alone .Rather than doing better or trying to understand why people are not buying your story even though its mot possible to please everyone but noo "I already said in synopsis that this is just for fun and I have not watch anime in 2 years so eveb if its shitty It is great and anyone not liking should leave " If you have problem with criticism then wrote in your diary .Don't post of website where people will see and review

The reply clearly shows that I don't beed to talk anymore though I want to ask this reply you made so to let others also understand you make Gabriel dude because he is dude in bible ? So In DXd Gabriel is Girl you donot know? And you are asking that where people make Gabriel girl from ? .Kid DXD is an anime who the fuck writes it by basing it from Bible for god's sake ? Do you know how lany wrong things are there if we with Bible? Thats the lamest excuse I ever heard .

It is not about folloeing the original story but you changing every character to og and naming the story DXd only using names of the characters nothing more.You donot need to follow plot but atleast understand the story .Writing for fun excuse is not a good excuse and at this point if MC id just Going to be Asia then the point og OG Mc is also pointless .Your MC is just behaving like Asia.Do you think someone like Gabriel cannot see through acting of some dumb person who overthinks everything and is just a coward .You will probably have excuse for everything so this is just my part of rant .You have not watched the anime in 2 years fine I dont even believe this because the way you write is like you have just read many DXd fanfics and trying your own. Even if this is AU excuse there are many nonsense here . And why is everyone calling Gabriel lord ? Do you not even know to whom Loed is addresses to . Will you write people calling Asia Lord Asia too then ?

I was getting frustrated for not finding works like this .Because even some slice of Life works are same anime trope and either hollywood movies.Some found are too rasicm filled chineese works so it is refreshing and I love it so far.The only nitpic is can you mention which year it is to have rough understanding if It is already mentioned then its my bad.I jave just a request please don't make it supernatural like suddenly there is hidden mahic world like that and even if you do just make sure the story is not ruined. I would suggest when he gets more knowledge and skill make him create games ( thats your specialty) . Or Apps

I don't know how it even have this much stars .Its literally just a short note generated by Ai and not even readable[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

Reading this reminded me of how I used to just pass the time in ff website.There were many stories that I loved and this was one of them .Though I think it was not complete so I was asking if you are going to just post it jere or continue it yourself?

Can you tell me the name of the mtl author or give link?

I wish I cpuld give it more no I will not.The stpry is good and it is going very interesting way.The chapters are little short and well its visible. You promoting yourself takes many words and the little left is the chapter.The story is too slow if you can't even get past his first year in Hollywood and its 100+ chapterd already.It is already slow well I gues if the chapters were little longer then the story wouldnot look slow as therr are many unnecessary chapters and even many smut chapters that are not needed.Too much will not make a goof story.Therr are many unnecessary chapters even so please look into those and keep writing. You don't have to go fast pace but just move the story a little bit a day by day story telling like journal will not help you.Your recaps and others things take half the chapters ..You will never finish if it is this slow .

Very true.Its just a waste of time. "I am powerless of future,It should happen must happen" what bulshit then the author doesnot need to make a fanriction if he doensot change.and what a wste of time to read it. If I wanted to read bible I could read it at home .the fuck is this shit ..

Dissapointment is what I felt when I read the story. Waste of reincarnation. I was so dissapointed that I feel dissapointed in my dissapointment at my dissapointment in your story.

No he is too young the achieve the feats he is achieving in this story.No need to make Sakura suffer.You can make timeskip.Do fourth grail war differently.Train the kids upto fifth grail war then start something.You can have other arcs of character growths.An MC who suddenly becomes shinji will have to build his emotions and bonds.He cannot just go aha the Holly grail and pew pew ...

The story is good.The writing is good and it is enjoyable if you leave your brain..The fic would have been more enjoyable if shinji was not too young.MThe story looked like a Chinese story where 9 Yr old become Planetary level.. This is ridiculous.A six-eight year old doesnot develope much no matter which era.What body developments are you talking about? Let Mc involve in fourth grail but not like this.It foesnot make sense even in fate world. I don't like it one bit ..The mC is too young for his actions

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Please Improve your writing quality.The story is good.If you have problems I can even do it for you for free.I just want you to finish this story and don't get discouraged.Everybody has problems ag beginning so good luck.

I applaud you for deleting reviews.that mentions that you are just copy pasting and taking credits for yourself.This fic is from fanfiction.net and It amazes me how disgusting people can be.Atleast mention that author's name or credit him but No . I also know you will delete thus review because I have seen many one star reviews but you have deleted it. So whatever ..and I will give spoiler without mentioning spiler . ISSEI IS NOT BOOSTED GEAR