this piece of garbage *author* strikes again stealing other people's translations from elsewhere and having the gall to publish them not only publicly but as original works, please go find this novel on novel updates, and report the author if that is a feature

please don't read this on here go support the people who are actually translating it and not just stealing others work like this phony *author* here, you should be able to find this book on novel updates

if you were it would not be public, so please set it to private or delete it you are stealing other people's work

A piece of garbage as an *author*, they are just stealing these novels from translators in other places on the internet and putting them on here, the full translations are available elsewhere and are updated more frequently there, use sites like novel updates rather than supporting this piece of garbage

A rip of a translators work from elsewhere on the internet, please if your interested go read through the person who translated it's site. Translation there may not be officially authorized but it's better than reading it on a person who's stealing others works webnovel

I approve of more murder

also AMAZING chap :)

Sidenote: but a little blerb saying XP is distributed after battle ends would be nice, ir at least that it's distributed In chunks if you plan to have her level up during a battle to win at some point, but it's a little confusing as to why she hasn't leveled up 5000, times and gotten enough stoned to evolve again

writing.suffers from this unbearable slowness, author doesn't know how people talk or think and dialogue is painful to read. Things happen all of a sudden and a Japanese names are shoehorned in for no reason when compared to other more fantasy names. The author seems to want to write a pure angel of a protagonist but can do little more than telling us he takes care of his mother to connect the reader. To the author of you intend to keep writing please take a look at other stories in the same vain, like kumo desu ga nani ka, overlord, average, white fang etc, on other sites, and take some time to see how they build their worlds and dialogue. To end this off words like indeed don't make your writing sound sophisticated the way you use them but rather klunky, please if this is your first novel or you are not studying creative writing and classical literature, avoid the thesaurus problem, by this I don't mean using actually sophisticated words but rather using useless fluff words that mean nothing like indeed and reasonable in an excessive amount. Aside from that novel suffers from the " a woman spoke to me boss, he is very nice, She must be the company manager" syndrome and it's just very hard to read and take seriously. I can't bring myself to recommend this book in it's current state for any reason.as it's just a slog to read and oppressively boring.

the Google translate is strong with this one

Another novel that suffers from because I told you so writing. The mc was a genius because I said so and also she hacked fast, stuff like this starts off the novel and doesn't seem to stop even at chapter 40 where I ended up dropping it. Going back to that earlier scene I mentioned, the author makes it very hard to connect or even believe the world in any way, extra details are seldom given and when they are explained the explanations don't hold up to scrutiny, the mc in her past life was a genius in everything and to prove this the author just says she was good and the only example he provides as to allow the reader to measure her skill at anything is with hacking, in which they mention that if the mc and throwaway male character were to compete in hacking she would win by a hairs breadth because the throwaway lost focus. That just ruins the immersion here, tv shows can get away with it because visuals help with this but even then it pains me, here it rips you straight out of the world and makes the mc go from a smart person to be idolized by the reader to a dummy who it's hard to believe was good at anything. If anything the way the mc died was the most believable thing in the novel, killing someone who succeeded more than you and is an absolute buffoon is a motive I can understand. In the fantasy land the mc isn't much better and the author really kicks up their boring confusing over explained writing style making dialogue tedious to follow and world building boring. Things in this novel are that way because they are, the mc was apparently superior to dragons at birth, and then only far ahead in her classes later on, classes which given that the author makes a point of saying the parents are good and reasonable have no point being included. Overall this novel had a nice concept, an overpowered female lead adapts and goes to rule the fantasy world but none of the quality to back it up. The characters are unbelievable as they can only be as smart as the author can write them, and the author seems to have no idea how to write a character that can think more ahead than tomorrow, the world is bland as we just hear about generic fantasy races, and the only interesting concept, a spirit tree is written so confusingly it pains me, where is it, how does it look, can it ever take an active role etc, all questions inadequateley answered. I don't mean to hate but if the author ever writes another story with a character they want to be believably smart, aside from addressing the plethora of writing issues (get here in a bit), the author should outline their arcs and allow for planned bits of info that the reader also gets in order to allow the mc to hone in on them themselves. Finally the writing itself, it feels like the author ran this book through grammarly then added a bunch of marks saying "Insert adjective/verb here" and used thesaurus.com to do so, and ran the entire page through it while they were there the word choice in this novel is appalling, and clunky, to give you a comparison of what this feels like to read, imagine an essay that got a D- in a 9th grade honors English class, and you have it. If the author does read this, I recommend writing a bunch of short stories and developing that way, a 10 page story that you can then post to forums and the like for critique not mindless consumption like seen in sites like webnovel would go leaps and bounds towards helping you understand what makes a good bit of writing, to be clear it's not your story idea here that is at fault overpowered protagonists can be written well take kumo desu ga nani ka, slime, unordinary, worm, blackbloodtales, shoggoth, world keeper, average, etc. Few can be written excellently but it isn't a detractor from a story. My issue with this novel lies in the authors struggle to show not tell and they can work on that.

Hacking is a slow premeditated thing, your not faster than a computer and you certainly aren't going to implement a novel new decryption method in minutes, aside from the fact that this is just establishing the mc as a total Mary sue, its just one of my pet peeves, it just irks me when people seem to think hacking is something you do on the fly, and frame apart of the work I do as, talent based and quick once you get it, rather than the complex process it really is. Cyber attacks can happen in milliseconds, they aren't designed in milliseconds.

you don't need to apologize here either, you clearly have people who liked the book, and getting over the writing style was hard for me. I wouldn't even say you wasted my time, the chapter while admittedly hard to read showed some promise and I enjoyed my brief look at your book. the basically 2 stars I gave doesn't mean your book is irredeemable just in need of improvement, and the fact that your willing to improve makes me excited to see where you go next :(

your willingness to improve is amazing, please let me know if you ever do get around to editing the chapters I would love to get to see what you have to say

The fact that people have this a 4.5 ish on writing quality makes me question my sanity.

I can't really tell you my opinion on the story as what threw me off more than anything was the writing quality. From the very beginning you get lines like "I'm tired" the girl said tiredly while brushing her teeth, and the like, lines like these and other issues seem to be present throughout the story. Skipping ahead to around chapter 50, I found that the issues at the start were still there and the author's need to tell not show just oozes throughout, characters will be told they are correct by the author or have things they say or feel justified by the author, in the first chapter the author says people told the mc she could play piano and violin like a professional when she was 5 and then confirms it by stating right after that "and the people who said that were correct, she could indeed play the piano and violin like a professional". I'm surprised and sad nobody pointed these issues out to the author at an earlier point because the description of the novel makes it sound like an interesting read, however even if the novel has emotional moments, or really anything of substance that feels like it would be ruined by the writing quality, and just over explained and stated as a fact to an obscene degree. Something which the author does in a later chapter literally just stating two characters have a deep bond and that also one of them can understand every language. If your able to ignore the huge issues with the writing quality and the borderline, Isekai smartphone, if this than that I tell you writing than this could very well be the novel for you. However as someone who translates novels as a hobby I can tell you that the issue here isn't the authors inability to write a coherent sentence but rather their inability to understand how to pull a reader I to their world, this novel reads like an American 5th or 6th graders first argumentative essay. Take that how you will. TLDR: horrible writing quality issue's, but not log in grammar department, read if you are just really good at connecting to lines like " "I love you" the girl said, and she really meant it her love for the person she said it to held no bounds and they share a deep connection, also she had a love skill allowing her to do the truest of love"

You keep mixing perspectives, I can see what your going for here but rather than invoking a sense of mystery, this just makes it hard to read. If you ever write any future novels, that switch from point of view as rapidly as this one does, consider a future version of the character or an outside observer doing the extra bits. Also for first person active, don't hesitate to use sound effects, contrary to what some English teachers might say slang and the like doesn't always detract from your writing, tone is a big thing in novels and is hard to master same with points of view. That's why you see new authors mark their points of views all the time. Anyway that's my piece, I certainly don't mean to be mean. The person typed aggravatedly.