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Cheap, extremely weak writing.
I slogged through the start now and the story /does/ start being more coherent after chapter 3 or so. In my opinion this is a massive turn-off for new readers, and you should not just expect people to stick through the terrible writing in chapter 1/2 in hope that it will get better, and I'm positive you're losing readers because of it. Still, after that it went up to about a 3/5, maybe 4/5 for webnovel, so I'll delete this review. Good luck.
You need to work a lot on your writing. Your sentences are generally 3-5 times as long as they should be, periods nowhere in sight, and it makes it really problematic to read. I'm not going to comment on the content, but your actual writing ability/skill in general needs a fair bit of training before it's even at a somewhat acceptable level. Right now, I'm constantly pulled out of your story and have to re-read things at times because it's so poorly put together. It's not worth the bother to keep reading. Of course you will be spammed with 4-5 stars because this is Webnovel, but don't believe them: they're starving and would eat literally anything. Both for your future readers' as well as your own sake, go back to the basics and learn how to write legibly before sharing more stories.
This whole thing was a single sentence.
Yeah.. except this is not the same account I used back then, since I changed my email after a long hiatus and couldn't be bothered to reset passwords, considering how your account literally doesn't matter here. What kind of idiotic thing would that be to lie about? Why would you even insinuate it? lol I was here back when Webnovel literally stole a ton of translators' works to get jumpstarted on the english audience, but of course no one cares about that anymore You're right though, and like I said, he writes entertaining stories, even if they're badly written in the technical sense. This is why he has become popular, but he uses a horrible style of hooking the reader and keeping them dragged along for literal years, while obviously caring very little about the actual writing quality of his own work. It's a style that's been used by the chinese web novelists for years and a lot of people on webnovel has copied it, sadly. There's a reason that writer has deleted any and every non-4star review literally since he started the novel. It would have a lot more mixed reviews if he didn't, and that broken system is part of why the story got popular to begin with—new readers had no way of discerning the later quality of the story they were about to start on. He's a shady, low tier writer, and if you're idolizing a person like that, you need a bigger perspective. Someone having a negative opinion about a lazily/poorly written story is not salty, crying, toxic or trolling, it is literally just pointing out mistakes and possibly ways to correct it. This is in hope of the author improving or as a warning for other readers so they'll know what to expect. The fact that you seem genuinely offended that I would say MyLittleBrother's work is of poor quality leads me to believe that you've never actually read a properly written book before. I would definitely go that way next, it will open your eyes to actually good writing. And no, I'm not expecting publishable quality out of webnovel at all, but if you're lazing out on your writing you should accept the negative consequences it's bound to bring, even if much lower standards for 5 stars are accepted here.
What? I know about MyLittleBrother. I started reading his below average but still decent story Dual Cultivation when it first started, and he continuously degraded it in quality by dragging everything out endlessly, so he could keep making money off it. If you think that guy is a good writer, you're the delusional one. Cultivation Online is no different. It's entertaining to a point, but is deliberately designed to take as long as possible, which leads to 80-90% pointless filler chapters and lack of progress.
Again, you're focusing on the fact that someone is saying something negative and learning nothing. Characters making huge leaps in logic to follow an unnatural narrative is not clever writing, no matter how you try to phrase it. Very confused on the quote you dug around in my history to screenshot and use as some kind of evidence of something. You think that guy is a fantastic writer too?
What I got out of it is that you're starting out trying to guilt your readers, by saying you're taking time out of your oh so busy writing schedule to explain to us fools what we didn't get, when we obviously should have. I did not read your wall of text explaining yourself, because it's entirely irrelevant. If a lot of people are not picking up on what you're trying to convey, then there's an issue in your writing, and overexplaining it in comments or telling your readers to pay better attention is never the fix. That's a pretty ironclad rule as a writer.
perspired?
wat
This story moves crazy slow. The lack of progress and constant POV switches to fairly unimportant characters is getting really tiring. Dialogue is also used or exposition at least half the time, and it makes everyone sound fake. Oh, and like so many of these types of stories, the MC knows literally everything for essentially no reason. This "super intelligent" MC got killed in a completely avoidable way and lucked into getting revived at the start. It's not a great character. Decently entertaining story, but not good writing.