Review Detail of CokeWhale in Is it Wrong to Employ Cute Girls in a Store?
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It reads like a badly autotranslated story. Sure, the words are in English, but the overall coherence level of the writing is terrible. I really tried to slog through more than the first few chapters, but trying to make sense of this nonsense was physically giving me a headache. I’d spend some time learning the language properly before posting anymore stories.
Is it Wrong to Employ Cute Girls in a Store?
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I slogged through the start now and the story /does/ start being more coherent after chapter 3 or so. In my opinion this is a massive turn-off for new readers, and you should not just expect people to stick through the terrible writing in chapter 1/2 in hope that it will get better, and I'm positive you're losing readers because of it. Still, after that it went up to about a 3/5, maybe 4/5 for webnovel, so I'll delete this review. Good luck.
FanHarem:aye aye
