Review Detail of CokeWhale in Limits of the Flesh in DXD

You need to work a lot on your writing. Your sentences are generally 3-5 times as long as they should be, periods nowhere in sight, and it makes it really problematic to read. I'm not going to comment on the content, but your actual writing ability/skill in general needs a fair bit of training before it's even at a somewhat acceptable level. Right now, I'm constantly pulled out of your story and have to re-read things at times because it's so poorly put together. It's not worth the bother to keep reading. Of course you will be spammed with 4-5 stars because this is Webnovel, but don't believe them: they're starving and would eat literally anything. Both for your future readers' as well as your own sake, go back to the basics and learn how to write legibly before sharing more stories.