lol I think this guy means that if 2 MC's exist they would always end up as enemies and kill one another... like one would want what the other had or one would feel slighted by the other... I mean in a wolf pack you can't have more than one alfa... they would end up fighting and the loser would be a beta.

I wanted to like this novel I really did but the Yuri element is too strong in this because if any of those girls like Jaune romantically and then go's for other girls romantically leaves a bad taste in my mouth like NTR dos... in fact It kinda seems that this author may have a fetish for a clueless MC that gets the interest of girls but instead of the girls being romantic with the MC she go's and picks up a girl instead... so far more romance has been between girls then the MC! I understand the author wants to add fluff and make the story more happy-go-lucky but the author seems to be focusing on the story of the girls rather than the story of the MC and at this point I almost forgot about the point of the story.

thanks, bro dogged a bullet...

it would probably be better if he joined because he would have more protection with a Duke family influence then nothing at all... besides the whole thing about slavery is kinda dumb when it comes to joining Rise's peerage... since he can predict how he would be treated. so all and all think of it like would you rather catch a ride in a limo or walk like a bum and get mugged by other factions's

wouldn't his perfect memory skill nullify his hollowing drawback? I mean since his aspect was downgraded there should have either been compensation or a lesser drawback?

is this your first time finishing a novel?

Bro making everyone antagonistic toward the MC and having him have dumb mood swings toward others is just a bad plot. Plus adding OC females when he's a weak chump gives him more trouble with the OOC Rias.

Bro, if you're going to post an MTL, at least proofread it first to ensure that sentences make sense at least half the time. Just copy and paste garbage on Webnovel, cluttering the feed of updated Fic's.

Great work so far. I just hope Kaya doesn't join the Marins like in a similar fic, which was kinda non-sensical and seemed like a betrail even tho she was still fixated on the MC.

adding 'plot' like this works well and the amount is fine... there's no rules saying 'plot' needs to take an entire chapter and I kinda like the way you are doing it... keep it up.

well all i can say is that the more chapters on WN the more subscribers you should get... also it helps show dedication to your work because a lot of authors drop novels around 30 chapters or so that's probably why you're having a hard time. if you show dedication too your works they should join overtime.

the author is good at writing but the story and character design kinda seem to be lacking... like a flat can of soda due to a few things like the MC being a background character with no idea about the world he's in making him seem like a drooling moron with no personality. the author tries to make the MC seem like an interesting character by giving him a devouring skill but that falls flat as well because the MC can't truly take advantage of his skill due to his lack of memories.... linda like giving a monkey a sward expecting him to be able to use it properly lol. the only saving grace is the merging souls give him memories of how to use his new skills. As for adding fate characters, I don't mind them so much it just seems like they don't blend well with the type of world and kinda seem to replace the main cast as a consolation prize so Bell can keep his herem.

lol sorry bro but I don't like how the MC is a dog-liking fool for heroes and follows Spider-Man like it's his duty... not only that he's way too passive and submissive towards his girls. he should have moved out of Aunt May's place as soon as he started bringing home girls to avoid May being an influencer in his relationships.

I agree so far the story is good but the way it's written makes it sap my attention span.... half the time it just says the same thing just in a different way.... most of the time it's easy to forget what you read in the story. this story is made up of a few words (understanding, gratitude, comradery, connection, ..etc) if you search those words you'll see a pattern of interactions that makes me want an AI model that rewrites sentences with certain words to add diversity to sentences... I just don't want to fall asleep every few paragraphs from the repetitive words.

mixed worlds suck because it's too chaotic and over complicates the story.... world travel is fine tho... powers and summons are fine as well.

only when he's with them and not behind his back because participation is one thing and ntr is when your girls go to others instead of you...

Great job so far I'm looking forward to the future chapters and the MC is way better than the MC's in a lot of fics on this site... most just seem to have a low IQ or EQ... and just throw them threw hoops with no choice on the MC's part.

bro just because it's normal doesn't mean it's not ntr it just means that no man knows for sure who the father will be...

I just feel like the writer's attempt to make the MC seem less OP just makes him seem dumb and nieve... I mean who goes to DXD where tri-hexa and alien gods threaten to destroy the world and only use a system with slow growth that doesn't really have any heavy-hitting abilities? what I mean about slow growth is the time it would take to be a conceptual being that may stand a chance against an alien god. in 90% of cultivation novels, it takes cultivators thousands of years to reach a stage where you could have a chance in a fight against an alien god.

Sorry, bro, but I can't read past the 5th chapter. The MC has little to no IQ and gets distracted with nonsense too much for most readers to follow. as for the idea of the story... it's not bad but the MC just makes it unreadable.