Review Detail of idk_what123 in Hoyoverse - The Demonic Swordsman
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Pretty good, definitely has potential. Though the dialog and inner monolouge are to long and talk in circles and certainly saps the enjoyment and motivation to read another sentence, if it just repeated a rephrase version of the pervious phragraph like three times.
Hoyoverse - The Demonic Swordsman
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I agree so far the story is good but the way it's written makes it sap my attention span.... half the time it just says the same thing just in a different way.... most of the time it's easy to forget what you read in the story. this story is made up of a few words (understanding, gratitude, comradery, connection, ..etc) if you search those words you'll see a pattern of interactions that makes me want an AI model that rewrites sentences with certain words to add diversity to sentences... I just don't want to fall asleep every few paragraphs from the repetitive words.