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batman_3_3_7hCommentedthey are in middle school in the show?
School passed without incident, although returning to middle school after a year of college was tiring, nothing like the unbearable feeling some reincarnators talk about in novels.- batman_3_3_15hCommentedCh 2 Chapter 2: Star building
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waste
"It will cost 1000 Potential Points to upgrade Mathematics (Grade 8) to Mathematics (Grade 9). Are you sure to upgrade? 』 - batman_3_3_1dReplied to Boredom_supreme
Minato is that age and author said mc and him have the sameish age
Five years. Five grueling years the Second Shinobi War had dragged on. The Kages, weary and weakened, desperately tried to cobble together a peace treaty. But negotiations sputtered. Kumo and Iwa, bitter about the proposed terms, clung stubbornly to their aggression, throwing more and more shinobi into the bloody maw of the war. - batman_3_3_1dCommented
i wouldn't fully says it's done like the other guy, but it's close if i where u id go back and redo some parts of the other chapters like the introduction of Lilith and how deans memories are done cuz they cause huge loop holes, Lilith doesn't need to be introduced right away and not in allison at all as it makes unnecessary loop holes, also there is an issue of power lvs mc even with deans memories is still human that needs protection of plot armor to do anything. the way deans memories are obtained are questionable they kinda just popped up with no explanation on how. the world setting needs a little tweaking to make them both flesh with each other but that's prolly already known. then there the whole issue with God and him being dead and Lilith thinking she has the ability to kill him for some reason. just go back smoke a joint and sit thinking abt this and u should be able to come up with sum
Any more comments on what is wrong or how I can improve to write better pieces in the future will be welcomed as I really want to get good at writing and thanks to those who commented to make me see where I went wrong and I will try to fix it and if you have any ideas on how I would gladly accept and use it Bye - batman_3_3_2dCommented
this fic went from good to questionable in one chapter, a few problems are that Lilith can't just go between possessing Allison and not and she's not strong enough to do anything to God or even have enough authority to harm humans, stiles would be able to exercise her easily within a day and make it so nobody gets possessed with dean knowledge and if he has deans memories then dean is dead meaning end of series god being dead as well. adding supernatural out of nowhere makes things complicated and maybe fast paced and Allisons and stiles relationship just being tossed in the trash isn't great either. story had potential but idk anymore, I'll still read till it becomes unbearable but it's also likely to be dropped
Ch 4 Chapter 4 - batman_3_3_2dReplied to FanFictionForge
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depends on how far you are taking this fic mid-long term Natasha works, just long term Wanda or Jessica Jones can work
1) Natasha Romanoff - batman_3_3_3dCommented
kinda dumb, have magic that causes the same effect as strength that he already has
That was Kaito's magic. Power Magic. Nothing fancy, nothing complicated ... just pure power. What will he be able to do with that? We shall see. - batman_3_3_4dCommented
why reincarnate if there are no memories, dumb
Deleting the Gamer's memories… - batman_3_3_4dCommented
why is he doing school sports there is no point to it?
After lunch, I went to my first training session with the team. Thanks to the two imbeciles being absent, the training session went quite smoothly. And thanks to the physical activity, I was able to calm down. But I couldn't talk to Gwen, it felt like she was avoiding me on purpose. - batman_3_3_4dCommented
so her system is stronger then mcs?
These are the only function but there is also a quest page and you just completed a quest now you can claim rewards of that quest.] - batman_3_3_4dReplied to MasterOfLight
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so he's the strongest in dxd then cuz jin woo is an outer god at the end
That being gave me the full power of Shadow Monarch with all of his shadows including Igris, Bellion, Beru, Tusk, Kaisel, Greed and many more. - batman_3_3_4dCommented
i think this is going to be a trash fic before too long
I'm also curious y'all don't mind if my use Aliens transformation like Four arms to, you know what. - batman_3_3_5dCommented
or just sell gold platinum diamond and other expensive stuff
"Good, I'll simply brainwash those idiot oil companies to change their investment to me." Morty said, biting off the popsicle and stood up opening a portal in front of him. - batman_3_3_5dReplied to Sonic_Spectre