Reviews of With The Sharingan In The MCU
With The Sharingan In The MCU
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I read through chapter 7. I like the story. The story has a bit of comedy that I enjoyed. I thought the writing was decent, but the biggest issue is probably the expressions and dialogue. The story has good enough fluid, but it's fast-paced and ambiguous. I thought the MC was whatever. The MC is your stereotypical transmigrator who thinks the world revolves around them. But I thought it was cool to include ravens as it adds uniqueness to the story. I also liked the MC's power not included as a mutant. Overall, I'll rate this at a 3/5.
This fanfic presents an intriguing premise that blends the Sharingan of Naruto with the expansive MCU. However, despite its promising concept, the execution is marred by several notable flaws. One commendable aspect of the fanfic is its inventive method of transporting the protagonist to another dimension. The incorporation of humor and creativity in this teleportation process adds an entertaining layer to the narrative, setting a playful tone from the outset. The introduction of the X-Men into the MCU landscape injects fresh possibilities for storytelling, introducing new dynamics and adversaries. The decision to limit the protagonist's knowledge of the MCU prevents the story from feeling overly predictable, allowing for unexpected developments and challenges to arise. Unfortunately, the writing style leaves a lot to be desired. Short, choppy sentences detract from the flow of the prose, while dialogue often feels stilted and unnatural, hindering immersion in the story. A major sticking point is the characterization of the main protagonist. The choice to depict them as a seasoned mercenary with preternatural combat skills and an immediate mastery of the Sharingan feels contrived, skipping over opportunities for meaningful character development. The rapid acquisition of powers diminishes the sense of struggle and growth that could have enriched the narrative. Moreover, the protagonist's edgy and aggressive demeanor undermines their purported goal of safeguarding the world from future threats. Actions such as hypnotizing and brainwashing individuals, as well as engaging in threatening behavior towards authorities, paint a concerning picture of their moral compass. Instead of inspiring unity and cooperation, their antisocial tendencies raise doubts about their ability to lead effectively.
It's a quite good MCU fanfiction!! MC (David) has an OP power (Sharingan), so it's a bit of boring because his power.. But I like how David doesn't want to change the plot and how he's not have all of his power (sharingan, nature chakra, etc), but have it little by little.. Can't wait to read next chapter.. Keep up the good job author san πππππ
