Reviews of Star wars: New Order(DROPPED)
Star wars: New Order(DROPPED)
Dr_Dred
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These gotta be fake reviews man, grammar=trash, character development= trash, to get reincarnated he βsavedβ a homeless women from getting ra*ed dies there and the women plus child are there left with the guy who murdered him but instead of anything bad happening the child goes on to be a billionaire and saves everyone in the world. he gets a system and the starter pack made him a god
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The plot armor is on divine levels with this one. System points are always there a plenty, and your eyes will hurt from rolling them too much. The concept of the story isn't bad. It's rather interesting but it's the execution there of that did not go well. The dialogues are highly unrealistic and remind me of Sheldon in the big bang theory more often than not. Events that occur are even more unlikely. The character has absolutely no skill at resource management yet despite mere paragraphs earlier barely able to purchase something will suddenly be able to spend hundreds of thousands a few paragraphs later with thrice as much spare afterwards when nothing occurred to increase said valuta. The story is full of such things. Things like building a base that's finished in a day then leaving. 'Random' summons being the heroes of an entire franchise, and that's not even speaking about the 'Romantic' inclinations. Read it at your own risk...
The story is rushed. The charcters arent described. I dont know how the character or important female character look like after reading 4 chapters. The autor generally doesnt describes important things. For example he lets his soldiers mine some ore and crystal on tatooine without introducing the materials. There is an inconsistency in the numbers. His system points jump between one and one hundred million. His dialogue is very forced. The idea is good, but the story needs a clear plan and this story doesnt have this plan.
The guy gets a system, I don't think anything else needs to be said TBH... But I'll go on anyway, the system gives him gear (including a lightsaber) and access to ALL force abilities from the start. So there is no initial struggle for anything making it boring from the start. The system can summon what are essentially slaves for him that are loyal etc... So the MC doesn't have to be written with good social skills and doesn't need to have good qualities as his people will follow him anyway which will take any tension at all out of his future choices. If he wants something he just buys it from the system since it can sell him anything so the MC always gets what they need when they need it (another thing making it boring). There are other things but I don't think it's really necessary to mention them.
π€ let see hmm well some may say writing is awful but lets question it first 1. is the material has a cost ? , its free btw 2. should it be appreciated , i guess it should be for me that is ( effort and ideas of the writer)3. it isn't a racist or it includes racism in IRL so it still a good material for entertainment plus its free so i give it a 5 star Β―\_(γ)_/Β― when you pay a book ofc you should criticize but since you didn't don't be silly and harshly criticize
This is a decent outline for a story. There is very little characterization and what little there is, is contradictory. Dialogue is stiff, impersonal, and scarce. There is little conflict beyond those scenes meant to demonstrate the MC's power and success. There is very little description of settings and imagery is non-existent. tldr; It's a story outline for a power fantasy set in StarWars.
