Sleeping_Giant
After reading more than a 100 chapters I've completely hooked on the story a system story that was unlike anything I've read before not overpowered or anything but it's enough to let the Mc survive. A few typos, but as the story progresses the author's storytelling improved along the way. Sadly, chapters are gonna be slow for a while but I loved the development of the story, I ask of you to whom that's reading this thank you for having the time to read a review of a long time reader
As someone who is getting into systems, this one is interesting. Characters who get sucked into their own works can be compelling and this one does a good job. I love that Chris questions his surroundings and things he wants to learn in his new environment. Also how the trials are handled is unique. I hope more are brought to this books attention.
So, let's start with the most prominent features of this novel. (I do not know if this is the author's first novel, so I will review it as if it is) Starting with the good things to the bad things, if you consider them as such, depending on your perspective the bad things I am going to say here may become good things, as the author may see them and hopefully, improve or fix them. Pros-> -The first good thing may actually be how the author handled the world. There isn't a lot to say about it and the characters since only 7 chapters have been released so far, and I've only read 4 chapters since it's late and I need to sleep. -The second thing is the stability of the updates, so far, he has released a chapter every 2-3 days. Cons-> -The first bad thing is obviously, the grammar. The grammar is all over the place, from small things like missed caps to terrible things like lack of punctuation and words being mixed up, making phrase comprehension a chore. -The second bad thing is the presentation. Massive walls of text that can sometimes be 8-9 lines long, this isn't good. It can make the readers lose themselves when reading, especially when the grammar is already a bit over the place and it happened to me quite frequently. My recommendation is to simply cut the phrases, its actually simpler than it sounds. But keeping it in moderation is hard. Some phrases are better being longer than divided, so finding the right spot can be hard. -Third thing may be the background, but I can't say much about it since as I said, only 7 chapters have been released. I'm talking about things such as the concept of the Tower of Trials, game like world with Gods, and systems. I am not giving a bad score about that, but as I said, its all about how the author develops this side of the story. I may nitpicking on this because there is a few mangas I read with the concept of towers and trials... There is even one whose name is literally Tower of Trials. Not assuming anything of course. Aside from that, I think the biggest problem is obviously... The grammar. It would be much more pleasant to read if everything made sense, but I can infer English isn't the author's main language. Funny enough, English isn't my main language as well, so I have a solution for this. Start writing on google docs, and download Grammarly as well. However, keep Grammarly deactivated as you write on google docs, this will allow you to enjoy good docs' automatic correction. After that, pass your work to Webnovel and edit it here with Grammarly, this will make your work 5 times better I'm sure of it. And it will also let you learn more about English itself. ----- Overall, if the author can fix his grammar, I would definitely give him a 4 star, but right now, I'll keep my verdict at around 3.5 stars. It's this low because everything is dependent on grammar, so if the grammar is hard, everything takes a blow, you can't rate the world background if don't understand it. That's all folks, peace!
Amazing start to the story, makes the Mc seem kind of depressing but I honestly like to see the dreams of the main character crushed at the beginning of stories and throughout. I liked the way everything went and I'd definitely recommend reading this story :3 it seems like it'll definitely be worth the read and has a lot of potential to be a great story! [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
After writing a ton of chapters I've managed to create a main character that doesn't seem like the default setting Mc where we get it you had a terrible life you get good now you get cocky all the sudden, he knows his strength and hides his uncertainty in his arrogant behavior. Christopher Morris isn't serious yet he takes his Book seriously to the point that he would kill anyone that will wreck his story. he's not a complete lunatic, he keeps his emotion in check whether the situation approved of his actions or not
The story is good but writing needs a lot of improvement. It's good but on many points the whole paragraph gets messed up and it gets difficult to connect with character. You have to edit from the start and if English isn't your native language, do try to find someone to proofread. Use grammarly to make the story batter. The concept is good and engaging but with the mistakes, it could make readers bored. Just try it, I know you have the potential to do it.
Alright, here’s my review! Writing Quality- the content is good, but the quality is terrible. 5/10 but I’ll round up to 3/5 cause you can’t rate like that on WN Updating Stability- 4/5 Story Development- 4/5, too early so this is just the default I give Chara Design- 4/5 World Background- 9/10, will round up to 5/5 ‘cause of wn rating system
Very interesting story. I love the concept, and it connected and appealed to me in a very meta way. The author does a great job of creating tension and describing his characters and whilst the grammars is a little bit inconsistent in the earlier chapters, it is worth sticking to and definitely improves alongside the quality of storytelling.
If you like the video-gamish stories, you will definitely like it. I like the main character, and the story flow is neither fast, nor slow. The language is neat and tidy, if not perfect. If I have any complaints, it's that paragraphs are too large at times, and punctuation is off the mark at few times , all of which are very forgivable, given the story pace and language. Well done author.