Reviews of Pokemon Alternate Universe Adventures
Pokemon Alternate Universe Adventures
Azrail93
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One of the most thought out pokemon fanfics i've seen, if it continues at this pace i'm sure it will definetaly become one of my favorites as well.
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This novel is very good, good work author!๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
overall thoughts: It's incredibly mid (mediocre) (in debth review) -(criticism) as of 550, his writing seems to be allergic to providing details and gives too much information at the same time. he is lazy in his use of adding other fictional characters and every character has no complexity. the mentor characters are benevolent powerful characters that are entirely selfless and talk the same way as each other. selflessness is a common theme among characters. the author babies you in general throughout the book. everyone of his characters falls into either 1. it's the cut and paste mc but with a different appearance. or 2. they are a shallow ghost of a character. often the author will repeat the same things over and over. the pokemon training times are inconsistent. the parents trained new pokemon faster than the years when they were on their journey, their improvement got close to, if not, rivaled mc's pokemon training time with his space. the dialog is rather terrible, people talk too much in one go and the responses are generalized. the dialog doesn't flow and the characters are unnatural when speaking. some of the dialog really made me cringe with how unnatural the actions taken were the author doesn't understand and underestimates intelligence and so the main character is of above average intelligence in the clothes of borderline genius. the system gives out too much unnecessary information. the mc has no had any conflicts that trully gave him pause (compliments) author did a great job in not being terrible, many novels made by amateur novelists are cringe and hard to read, not the case here. I didn't have to think overly hard while reading. a lot of the decisions the main character makes actually make sense. the author seems to know what he wants out of his story. the best part of all is the fact the author hasn't lost motivation to write which is admirable. (improvements) add comparisons, they will help give a visualization to the reader. streamline the system info, to much info becomes monotonous to read. don't list measurements, use comparisons, let us use our imagination read up on intelligence, the way you sell your character is smarter than you have shown us. show don't tell, people don't like to be babied so you provide clues on instead of outright giving away everything. the dialog needs to flow and become more natural. ease up with pleasantries and spelling when writing informal speech, not everyone pronounces full words. people will play with words that go beyond what is proper. people are complex. motivations differ, surprise shows differently on people, people go through combinations of emotions. you need to separate your characters personality . their personality are too close to each other. give your mc something/ someone to struggle with, a roadblock of some kind. there is nothing to push the story in an interesting direction. keep consistency with the timings.
The Story is not bad but sadly it's boring like so incredibly boring. The MC after 100 chapters is still 4 or 5 Years old. we've spent 100 chapters on just world and info dumps I'm sorry but that's just too much. Story had potential but sadly it's ruined cause of the Pacing even CN novels have a faster pace.
Ok bro, the amount of detail this guy put into his story is crazy asf. Dude made new weekdaysโฆ have you read a fanfic where the Author makes new weekdays? I havenโt. But thatโs not even it, you can tell he takes time into the details and everything, keep in mind heโs writing from between 2800-3000 words per chapterโฆ (I canโt do tht ๐ญ) the MC isnโt a dumb*** and actually thinks and uses the abilities at his disposal instead of forgetting about them, I consider that a bonus tbh. Though it says itโs slow paced, itโs not really boring and is actually readable thatโs a w. Ima keep reading update yall though ๐ฎโ๐จ
How this story is so successful is quite crazy to me. About 300 chaps in and half of your story is "this week is going well, sebs endurance has increased to A rank." Like, what does that even mean!?!?! I'm not saying write out a training montage but I don't remember an instance where we see some actual training like "hashirama trained his endurance by using vine whip on a tree trunk for 12 hours" just something if it's going to be most of your text. Grammar is great, but the age thing is super weird. he's 3, but he looks 17 and interacts with a 4 year old? just have him go to college or something, it reads Hella weird. Pokemon selection to each their own and no comment here. I could probably think of more, but yea, it's a super dry story that you can skip half the chapter cause it's filler and that I have no clue how is so popular
For me this FF is one of the best I have ever read, world building, power level, careful thinking, smart MC, everything is really going in the best directions. By reading this FF, I can imagine that the Author is really giving his thoughts and mind for this FF so Cheer and thank you. THIS IS REALLY REALLY ADDICTING
One of the best Pokemon Fanfic I've read so far(1 out of 3). -The story so far is slow paced but it has tons of chapter so it's fine. I -guess? -It has a HUGE world background so it will equal to a HUGE INFO DUMP(con for me). -Well most of the time I feel like reading a diary cause there is to little conversation going around. -Was waiting for more fakemon/self-made pokemon, so far it showed 1 fakemon which is an evolution of remoraid(I think). -Was waiting for the mega still have not shown yet. -many variants for gyarados the author really likes his gyarados. -So far so good but it has just too many INFO DUMPS but Its not bad enough to drop it.(I mostly skim through it). Hope for more :D :D