Eren_fraser
An other masterpiece from Eren_fraser. While for now there are only six chapter, its alredy awesome. This story is about a primordial something that has not really be done before. Long chapters with great development and as of now a really interesting plot. From what I have seen the mc seems to have the same personality as the one from his other stories (so wanting to be free, cold except for his close family and his lover. Intelligent and calculative). The story takes inspiration from Dream, with Hypnos creating the dreaming. Like always no grammatical nor typing error and many updates. This is a PJO ff but I have a question, is it also Marvel? because Hypnos said Hela and not Hel (her name in mythology). Overall a fantastic story to read if you like great ffs with character development and plot development and not everything always being repetitive and not wish-fuffilment. (Sheesh I wrote too many and but I don't have the motivation to change it lol. Hope this review helped.)
It's an alright story, almost no grammar mistakes and world building and lore is quite good. But the personal turn down for me that make it unbearable for me to continue reading this story is romance, it was too fast and unrealistic and corniest thing I've ever read. If you can bear the unrealistic romance then go ahead read it, it is good.
Everything was going quite well. Was. Writing quality is excellent, Story development is great (a little slow, but it does not really detract from the story), I can't really speak to the update frequency as I had just started reading so I left it as a 4 of 5, and the world background is really fantastic. what really lost me was the extremely forced romance between the Mc and Hera. It was... abrupt, jarring even. Personally, I dislike the pairing altogether, but that is not why I gave a 2 of 5 for character design. In my opinion, the whole interaction (which takes place between 2 chapters and a single party) was entirely forced and ruined any sort of prior character building for the Mc (in my opinion). The Mc was just recently described as extremely indifferent. Except, apparently, for the goddess of marriage, whom he quite literally just met and makes his little heart just flutter (she is literally a hot headed and brash character at the moment, who questioned his power infront of everyone, and is now somehow enraptured by him). It's a "love at first sight" type story (which I abhor and do not believe in). I stopped reading at the "as they drew closer to each other" part. If love at first instant is your sort of story, give it a read. everything else was great.
Generally pretty enjoyable enough so that I paid for extra chapters. However I feel that the story and character falls to the wayside and becomes far less fleshed out when the relationship is introduced. It feels rushed like the author is trying to buff Hypnos’ partner to try and make her relative to him and likeable when we haven’t even grown attached enough to Hypnos himself by that point. It’s well written and definitely draws on some great imagery but overall I’m less into it as it feels forced to get the story to a point the author wants to write about. That being said I still did give the author my money so…
The author always come out with excellent stories that only engage with the readers but also make the readers crave for more they story is a about a primordial and it shows the hierarchy of the gods. The story goes on to show the abilities and divinity of these divine beings and the MC adventure in his point of view it gives elements of Lord the mysteries (at least to me) and DC Dream the Endless but also showing his uniqueness and thoughts so I highly recommend you read this.