Reviews of My Vampire System

I really like the idea of story but............there is a "but".where should I start......1 the MC have the same intellectual quotient as sponge

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Inconsistent, the main characrer is outright unintelligent, and the whole story is built up for the convenience of the main character. The first chapters looked really promising with a great foundation but soon it all went downhill. Wouldn’t recommend.

well... I read a lot. And I have read hundreds of chapters of the Nr. 1 "vampire system" novel. And at the end, I was highly disappointed. All the praise is BS in my eyes, because it is just a school teen drama overall, and nothing more. MC is pretty dumb and most decisions are illogical and I often had awkward moments when reading. Even had to prevent myself from hitting my forehead against the table I was sitting in front... Can't recommend it, if you are not into 100% magical teen school drama with a lot of illogical decisions.

Let's start with the writing quality. The arrangement of the entire novel can be summed as this -middle school writing. Grammer is lacking in each chapter. The lack of proofreading is evident and each chapter feels as if the writer is posting immediately after finishing. Sentences lack flow and the tenses are mixed up several times. An effort to increase the repertoire of the English language could help with that as well as learning sentence structure. For updates, bribing people to pay power stones for shorter chapters leaves a bad taste in my mouth. I'm not quite sure, but I do believe you could combine 3 chapters into 1 and equal a normal chapter anywhere else. Also in terms of content, the story has pacing problems and immersion issues. I am constantly being told information when the writer could use context clues and character dialogue. Or even in story events and responses. Which leads to character design. The side characters are bland and lack character. Some are infuriating and others are bland. The plot has several holes. Why is system so unhelpful? Is a personality really necessary? The school legitimately makes less sense the longer I read. Mass drug use and suicides should be through the roof in an environment like this one. Not to mention Quinn himself. The boy has been abused, abandoned, and ostracized for how long now? Whatever length of time it was he lacks any real mental trauma or issues. Not even to mention how he isn't desperately trying to avoid being in a lower position. His choices seem to be the those made by a sheltered person. Someone who doesn't know the world around him. Kind of like how I still barely understand the world or even the school. Things are barely described and the explanations feel like I'm reading a manual. Suffice to say while the potential of this story might seem great, the not so small number of problems plaguing this story makes it difficult to give a favorable review. Maybe in the future when the writer improves his mastery.

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I liked the story. I'm a fan of vampire tag so of course I liked it. I just want to say: - By the order of the Jarl! DO NOT stop right there!!

It's just a single chapter but I can't say that Iam not interested in it. Vampire and another race people. Really can't wait for more. Nice plot for main character. Weak to strong huh. Please I want more.

Don't know what passed for the WSA Awards last year, but this isn't what I'd call 'Gold tier' material. If I saw this on the Potential Starlet or New Tropes in Original Novels, THEN I'd say was acceptable but there are just too many things that make this lackluster and interesting to read. First off, upon reading the first few chapters I don't find the MC interesting at all. The "bullied as a kid, parents die, pity me" party has been played out. Even modern Isekai anime/manga doesn't do this anymore as it's like watching a reverse Redo of Healer -- readers have a scouter for this type of stuff lol. We can gauge that this guy is going to get some special power or ability and grow. But wait... Where's the growth? I skip a few chapters here and there and he's still the same DUNCE from the first few chapters. If there was ANY character development it isn't apparent. The diction, flow, and sentence structure are flawed like, for a No. 1-- it isn't even funny. I'd think by this point in time he'd get an editor or something because I couldn't even finish the third chapter. I hope we see some decent stories this year in comparison to this. And they aren't judged on their commerciality, because reading the comments the readers feel scammed lol. Maybe it's a generation issue, but we need something better to bring people to the platform.

I am amaze about a gift .I feel good .the great day after this story is awesome is greast I am just doing this for exp 10.is great cool awessome great is dog

it's not deserved its ranking, it's very ordinary with some force plot and childish character. .................................... ,/,,..........

To be honest, this is not good, like it's really bland... I do not understand how it is the first ranked light novel here when there are masterpieces like Lord of Mysteries and Reverend Insanity on here. I don't really know how to explain what reading this novel feels like, you really need to experience it to understand.

This is overrated. The story is not as clean as it seems. The characters are disappointing, specially the mc. The world building.. if you can still call it that are a total mess. Mess because it's plainly idiotic. Though I get the author wants the story to highlight the discrimination and abuses as such but and BUT it got a bit overboard. Any society would crumble apart if there is no set up rules and laws THAT organize and manage everything. But in the story they just do what they want. I'm sorry I'm really frustrated cuz I thought it's gonna be good so I waited for long till the chapters are at 1000+ hayst.. sorry the writing is childish.

gets progressively more illogical and negative reviews get deleted. What is said to be logical or make sense in one chapter is immediately contradicted in the next chapters. I made it to 574 but it's just getting more painful to read.

Well written story, with a pretty deverse group of characters that feel fleshed out and will have actual character growth, pretty fun system and power set up. The only problems i had were its similarity to unOrdinary the webtoon, basically the structure of the military is just a huge bully environment, really takes the realism out of the whole, 'world needs everyone to unite' vibe. Its not that the characters are making dumb decisions or stupid, they just lack credibility when the world around them seems like its primary school.

Very interesting aproach to the system and vampires. Nice writing style and stabile updates. Very interested in how the story and his progressing into vampirism turns out.

To make a long rant short, the background and world aren't bad. Every character is dumber than a brick though, and the MC gets pushed along by the story rather than actively doing anything. Every time he needs someone to help him, a person finds him and is single mindedly obsessed with that one thing he needs help with, so they don't question anything else. Words are often used wrong (bored instead of board), and things seem to be made up every time they are mentioned. Every chapter by itself is okay, maybe even good, but when you can remember what else has happened nothing makes any sense. For example, the abilities most people have are only locked in type, so earth users can only then use earth skills, never fire, but they can get better ones later. At first at least, since later characters act as if once you get an ability book, that's it, no more ability books, no upgrading, so if you get a weak one you are stuck with that forever. The world and general story are so diverse from the actual writing quality that I can't help but wonder where they are originally stolen from.

This is definitely not a rank #1 web novel. Also, to the people who said this is in the same level sa Lord of the Mysteries, you're high right?

Honestly I don't know whats so good in this webnovel. There's bunch of FORCED plots and twisted twist that you wouldn't understand how and why did that thing happen. Oh not to mention the most FORCED character twist I've ever read, CIA the ****? She's with pure and watching over Layla and when she found out that Quinn and Company have big secret she just wants to leave them alone because she's scared, I thought pure are at least decently fearless? Not to mention, beast are common existence in the novel. They should always have strong will since they are trained to become one. Hah, it's hard to explain but EVERYTHING ABOUT CIA DOESN'T MAKE SENSE! YOU CAN'T APPLY COMMON SENSE TO HER! THE AUTHOR DESCRIBED THAT HER REACTIONS WE'RE GENUINE, THAT SHE'S AFRAID BUT EVEN WITH THAT STATE OF MIND; QUINNS INFLUENCE STILL WONT PENETRATE TO HER WILL LOL (Quinn's influence would usually works in this kind of situation)😂 She's scared and wants to stay away to quinn and others ~author. IDK AUTHOR. Ver very very contradictory plot and I DON'T FVCKIN GET THE POINT. THE WORLD VIEW IS VERY SMALL OR I'D SAY MINISCULE TO BE HONEST. ONLY BIG THREE OR FOUR AND MILITARY, VAMPIRES AND DALKI? SO HOW ABOUT OTHER COUNTRIES? ARE ALL THESE FAMILIES INCLUDED IN UNIFIED PEOPLE OF THE WORLD? I DONT FCKIN KNOW. THE FORCED CLIFFHANGERS ARE ALSO GETTIN' INTO MY NERVES. There's no ending to problems and the keep on popping each chapters. it's VERY FORCED! VERY VERY VERY FORCED. I know conflicts are necessary for the story to become enjoyable but at this rate, I believe iim ot the only one who's getting annoyed.

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