Isekai_enjoyer
I like the story overall, but author your going way too fast, such as describing, entire fight scenes in one sentence + Jean should never have been a choice ororo would have been better, you also skipped loads of stuff. you should try to make the story less fast-paced as that takes away the interest of many readers.
Slowly and with good handwriting¹. This is how I would describe this story if it were like that, it only has good lyrics, really. Well at least the first 9 chapters to be honest. The story seems to move quickly in the first few chapters, but oddly enough, the more you read, it doesn't seem to. Although it is true that after chapter 9 it could be said that the story, now, goes slowly and with good lyrics. The plot is captivating but loose in some places the first 9 chapters, even so, then it completely caught me, really. There's a huge overall improvement to the story, which leaves me wanting more to be honest. In short, it is one of the few FanFiction that I recommend reading and having in your library. That is, doing something slowly/calmly and neatly/orderly results in a better quality product.¹ Atte, by magic.