Syed_Taha_Hussain
Loving the progression of this story. Starts right in the thick of the action as a princess sneaks out of her kingdom and is attacked by bandits only to be saved by the protagonist. From there the protagonist is brought into the royal court as guard and must navigate his way in this strange new world he finds himself in. The story is well-written and flows nicely. The characters are all unique and have distinct personalities and the chemistry is well-done between the protagonist and the princess. This is exactly what you want from a webnovel - a nice, light read with characters you care about and a clear and engaging plot to follow. Can't fault this one so far. I will definitely keep following it further.
It's a interesting plot with a great world building. I love author's approach in monarchy era and I'm excited for Jack's journey as a new noble in the castle. Hopefully he got the princess lol. Now, the only issue is I guess the long dense paragraph. If you don't mind me suggesting, it'll be better to break down the paragraph to ease the reading. Keep up the good work, Author! Good luck! <3
For a beginning author, you did pretty well, mate! I really like how you wrote the entire chapter! *For starters, you should "Borrow" *cough* an image that perfectly fits your story in google. Yeah, i know, copyright, but, that is just for now. You could ask artist to commission a book cover so your novel would become a chef's kiss book~ *There are grammatical errors here and there but not enough to disrupt me from my reading. it was actually really good! Well, there are the use of adverbs, redudancy of "far away" you could use distant or miles away to make it sound more dramatic. At the end of the day, these are just my suggestions. You still have the last touch for editting your story. Kudos for the author, and good luck, mate!