shri_author
imagine... every single sentence... throughout every paragraph... looking... like... this... - am I supposed to read this like I'm out of breath or something?? the first couple chapters are essentially just a fancy info dump. they're short story-like, diary entries that dump character and background info. not engaging, not particularly interesting, just found myself wanting to skip it. haven't gone further than the ❤️...❤️chap...ters...❤️❤️ so idk if it gets better or not
I enjoyed the poetry in the beginning and the poetry in Anastacia's POV in ch 3. The plot is great - i like where the story is going. It's interesting and the characters have a variety of fascinating personalities . It's got a promising storyline. Great job there! About the writing quality - I think it needs a bit of work, mainly punctuations, capitalization (when starting paragraphs/sentences) and minor grammar errors, which can be fixed easily once edited. Your poetry is very good, I really enjoyed it. Keep up the good work, author!