Comments of chapter undefined of Reborn In Modern family as Iron Man!

The quality is better but the fact is that we are still in the same conversation that started three chapters ago and that's a problem.

I believe you should really outline your chapters and decide if there's enough content. Multiple POVs of the same event is a symptom of a lack of meat and bones to your story. My suggestions would be to cut down on the POV switches in a given chapter. Avoid unneeded flashbacks that the reader has already experienced. Expand on the relationships between the family above the superficial sitcom format. Also avoid Mc holding the idiot ball and have him circumvent some of the misunderstandings. Thanks for the chapter and for reading my criticisms.

Yes, i feel like over all your writing quality has improved and I just want to say keep up the good work

Why not make longer chapters, and release less frequent. This is getting annoying, cause it feels as if you stopped writing mid chapter

way too slow and it is 3 chapters into a conversation that could of been easily avoided. Not to mention that this is just a repeat of what already happened ...

it feels short compared to the previous chapter. like it was cut in half

To shorts

Thanks for the hard work

I didn't notice any increase in quality. The end of this chapter is just the previous wendigo fight copy pasted since the POV randomly changes and doesn't make sense for the context because they wouldn't be able to see half of the effects described from a random camera that managed to catch some of the fight.

🇧🇷 I'm not going to lie, I hated this chapter. The only and main cause is because it doesn't show anything new. I know it's good to leave detailed history and all that, but when it's just a rehash of everything that's already happened, it's not cool, it's just frustrating. And the story literally didn't move forward in 3 or 4 chapters. And the fact that the chapters are annoyingly short doesn't help matters either. I've been waiting for days to see some kind of family development and how much James is going to tell them about his secrets. I fully support this FF and I hope you keep posting and trying to improve, both as a person and as a writer. To the next. 🇧🇷

Merci pour le chapitre !

I can't wait to know thair reaction [img=update][img=recommend]

Couldn ’t you have finished the whole flashback in this chapter so we dont have to endure it in the next? Wouldn’t have been to hard as it has been written before. No thought required.

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love it keep the good work, altough it would be better if he rip off the band and show them the monster in his base so like that they will believe him

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Looking forward to more