Comments of chapter undefined of I am the Entertainment Tycoon

I've noticed the dialogue seems to be slightly stiff and robotic, like "hello don't worry about it. my name is Samantha Walker and I work as a barista here" like 1 you don't need to treat readers like we are dumb. it's clear you are a barista with the context we have. and nobody speaks like that at all. theyd be like "oh, don't worry bout it. By the way (or maybe anyway or another phrase) I'm Samantha Walker.

you can't buy a coffee shop for 6000$, the equipment in there only costs more than that. forget about subleasing the shop paying advance, also any brand value that the shop might already have and the existing customers. It will be many times more than that.

Pretty sure 10k ain't getting you a shop, furthermore it's close to university with good traffic

Can you really buy a coffee shop for 6k? Realistically?

Buying a coffee shop for 6k dollars is highly unlikely. Be it the land, the equipment and everything else, it's ridiculously unrealistic. I'll just pretend that he got like 70k and bought it for 65k or something.

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Thank you for another chapter 💜💜💜 I would like to recommend using the Grammarly site for your chapters and making conversations as normal as possible, depending on how people talk about your daily life. This is just my opinion and for me the chapter is great and you put your everything in it so I support you to continue this story 💜💜💜

hey author, I'm noticing a repeat grammar issue where 'sign' is used instead of 'sigh'

Buying a shop for 6,000. No matter how tiny the building. That is beyond unrealistic. Unless the novel takes place in some extremely povrished 3rd world country. The building alone would be worth well over 10x that amount. I guess we have to throw out common sense when reading this novel. Or just assume the value of everything in this world is vastly less than are reality.

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this whole chapter feels forced, like WTH was with that negotiation? if it was 2 kids I'd believe it. ..and 6k for a coffee shop? is that in monopoly money?