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- lordkc6mthReplied to Soul_Parade
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the thing
I changed the cars gear and drove off what I had not noticed was that a Hand with many scars was attached under the car. - lordkc9mthCommented
+1 spiderman playing basketball is ok but its not fair to anyone cuz he can decimate the whole team by himself if he uses full power. And if you want to justify that he's playing normally you have to keep describing that he's holding back which won't be a good experience for you or the readers. So it would just be better to say he won the match rather than describe the match if you want to have him play basketball professionally for him to earn the money.
Comment/Emote/GIF here if you want me to ๐ฟ๐ฒ๐ฑ๐๐ฐ๐ฒ ๐๐ฝ๐ผ๐ฟ๐๐ ๐ฎ๐ ๐บ๐๐ฐ๐ต ๐ฎ๐ ๐ฝ๐ผ๐๐๐ถ๐ฏ๐น๐ฒ ๐ฎ๐ป๐ฑ ๐บ๐ผ๐๐ฒ ๐ฎ๐๐ฎ๐ ๐ณ๐ฟ๐ผ๐บ ๐ถ๐ ๐ฐ๐ผ๐บ๐ฝ๐น๐ฒ๐๐ฒ๐น๐ ๐น๐ฎ๐๐ฒ๐ฟ ๐ถ๐ป ๐๐ต๐ฒ ๐๐ฒ๐ฟ๐ถ๐ฒ๐! - lordkc9mthCommented
Glad you have mentioned that he's holding back. Makes much more sense
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- lordkc9mthReplied to UdayWrites
hmm I get that you might wanna convey experience beats however much physical capabilities that other person has. But we are talking about spiderman who can lift tons of weight have spider reflexes and be very fast. By the time curry shoots he'll have ball in his hand with his speed or can jump so high that he can block it easily. So it's just pointless trying to get spiderman play basketball with normal humans kuroko no basket style. So I would say if you have that kind of chapters ahead please try to think some other thing up. It might not be as good as you feel.
Ch 16 Showdown - lordkc9mthCommented
superhuman reflexes, superhuman speed, superhuman strength should make it really easy. And this is a spiderman fic not a basketball one. I think you are spending too much detail into the game. And its not a game between equals, its a game between a superhuman and a normal human. So it should end pretty quick.
Ch 16 Showdown - lordkc10mthCommented
pretty sure he called them dad and mom couple of times in before chapters. I'm like why the drastic character change. They were talking good before as if they both were going to bash dumbeldore and then it suddenly become them supporting dumbeldore. No idea whats happening
"Now, Jamie, he accepted - he called you brother several times. But your mother and I? No." - lordkc11mthCommented
I wonder, it might just be the dead guy's consciousness dreaming an extremely realistic dream.
Peter decided on the train that he wouldn't waste this second chance. No other person that commits suicide gets these kinds of perks, at least he doesn't think they do, so Peter would live his new life however he pleases and make the best of every situation. - lordkc11mthCommented
so it's temporary then?
'To think I was so vain as to think of keeping my hair, when I can carry all my things in a small pouch now. I can't keep from making sacrifices. I still have my bottom-line but being The Avatar for a couple of weeks is barely a sacrifice worth mentioning for a bag of holding.' - lordkc11mthCommentedCh 2 Notice
- lordkc11mthCommented
And the guy is supposed to be a US president in his previous life? why the back story if he is making such stupid decisions?
Of course, the giants that will serve him would be the Mountain Giants, Domeric was trying to get rid of the original giants so no one would wonder why there are 2 types of giants. - lordkc1yrCommented"I would never let anyone hurt Lily, I can be angry and disappointed with many of his attitudes, but I will always love her, protect her and wish her the best in her life, either by her side or from a distance, surely from a distance given my current situation with her"
- lordkc1yrCommented
notorious should be the correct word
As for my major concern in life, money. It was solved by the kind ramen guy, Teuchi. His daughter, Ayame, notice the how popular I was and devised a strategy of making me work in their stall. - lordkc1yrReplied to DreamThree
oh yeah true. I didn't imagine they would be after web novels as well. Anyway, you are actually doing a great job on the songs with meaningful lyrics and rhyming, I was just complaining because it would be easier for me if the song already existed, please ignore. All the best!!
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