Entrail_JI
I may sound full of my self and you may ignore me just stating my opinion I think you can improve the way characters interaction with each other, their dialogue doesn't really sound...hmm..you can say how usually people talk? I really like it overall just whenever there is dialogue between characters it feels odd.
Why is everything involving Everblood forced? Seriously, the MC got rid of all the bodies he killed without using a bomb, but conveniently leaves the only one who would hand over his identity. Everything that involves this guy is forced, the first time was forced and this one was too. Good thing it's just this character and the rest of the work is well crafted.