ClasslessAscension
The whole isn’t that bad, even with my high standards, but just a part that REALLY puzzles me: I NEED REASONS FOR THE LOST LOVE OF THE MC TO APPROACH HIM… Just the tiniest bit of detail, like “She looked a bit drunk...”, or even just “Why him and not someone else? Josh wondered later. That he might never know.” smth like that, explaining or just talking about why in heIl would she just go talk to a random hobo…knowing you there must be some reasons that we might learn of when we get chapters of her POV, but even then mentioning the why doesnt hurt ;) if I was just casually exploring, that would’ve been enough for me to drop this, like instantly… Yea I said I had high af standards ;P I know you probably wont edit it, cuz d*mbnovel erases chapter comments when you do that, and im not asking you to, just felt like rambling a little bit ;P anyhow on to the next chapter… ;)
It was dark, cold and damp as well as cramped, here one could see a teenager about 16 years old, he had a some kind of book in his hands and was in some kind of ruins, he'd spent about a year and a half in these Webnovel Ruins, and finally the day had come, he'd found it, what he had searched for all this time... HE FOUND GOLD!!! (well done author this book is amazing, I love your writing style!)
Not going to say that this is amazing or something, but what I will say is that this made the character more human. Usually authors would just pile misery on top of misery on the character with very little emotion. However here we get more of the sense on the MC's mental state and why he fell in love. So this chapter is much appreciated.