Too stupid for a supposed Aduld+250 IQ of Peter Parker.Bad grammar needs improvement on that front.Too much unnecessary description of useless stuff the MC does.....I guess this is it,
_oinkchan
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LIKE_oinkchan:If you stick around, it will get better I promise. Regardless, thanks for the review.
Is it really a harem if Peter have gf each from different universe throughout the multiverse? Just a thought... Anyway on another note, i would love if you add a rivalries for gwen, doesn't really have to end as harem but just to tease and made gwen jealous with Mary Jane Watson move in next door as an Onee-san character for Peter (even tho same age) wise and give advice with a little teasing and flirt. And then a side mission with Black Cat /Felicia (She love to flirt not with Peter but Ouboros persona just like the amazing Spiderman cartoon) where Ouboros team up with for underground /black market related mission that he doesn't want to involve Gwen. I mean you already layout the foundation of his love the mafia life and love to wear suit. So why not an anti hero secretary (BlackCat) to handle his underground empire. I remember the superior spiderman (possess by doc oct) made his own company call Parker Industry. So why not have an underground black market /mafia group to help control rival clan just like Yakuza did to control scum to discipline them and keep the streets clean. Also collect tax. This is just an idea. Hope i do good in giving ideas š”
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This should balance your readers on the harem and non harem factions. Rivalry is not harem as you can see K-Drama format is always i Female MC with MC love interest and Male rival MC. And even the MC have a childhood Female becomes Female MC source of jealousy. This is basically reverse harem with Female Lead but it okay it Korean Drama does it. But when Harem did it every one looses their mind unless you slap Rivalry tag instead of harem on it. Bias against Harem even though not all is bad. Even the actual Spiderman comics have like more or less 17 different girlfriends whenever Peter x MJ have a break. Lemme see... MJ Watson *red head Gwen Stacy *blond Black Cat (Felicia Hardy) *platinum blond Silk (Cindy Moon) korean *jet black Jessica Jones *strawberry blond? Not to be confused with Ultimate Jessica Drew (Female Clone of Peter in 616? Bi sensual? with original Peter memory of all Peter's GF) *brown Kitty Pryde (X-man) *brunette Miss/Cpt. Marvel *blond Mockingbird (Peter's security for Parker Industry for day job) Betty Brent (Daily Beugle) Liz Allen (School cheerleader) Just to name a few...
Nurarihyon_4588:Is it really a harem if Peter have gf each from different universe throughout the multiverse? Just a thought... Anyway on another note, i would love if you add a rivalries for gwen, doesn't really have to end as harem but just to tease and made gwen jealous with Mary Jane Watson move in next door as an Onee-san character for Peter (even tho same age) wise and give advice with a little teasing and flirt. And then a side mission with Black Cat /Felicia (She love to flirt not with Peter but Ouboros persona just like the amazing Spiderman cartoon) where Ouboros team up with for underground /black market related mission that he doesn't want to involve Gwen. I mean you already layout the foundation of his love the mafia life and love to wear suit. So why not an anti hero secretary (BlackCat) to handle his underground empire. I remember the superior spiderman (possess by doc oct) made his own company call Parker Industry. So why not have an underground black market /mafia group to help control rival clan just like Yakuza did to control scum to discipline them and keep the streets clean. Also collect tax. This is just an idea. Hope i do good in giving ideas š”