Review Detail of Yueliang_Haizi in Life Drain System
Review detail
Hello, this is my first book and I am getting better with each chapter. Either way, just because I wrote it does not mean I will not judge it fairly. I do think I could do better on telling more visual details, and yes I know it is focused a lot on the system for now however that is just so you can see his growth, that will be brought down a lot eventually. Other than describing visuals, I think I am doing pretty well. If you think I am wrong please leave comments or something on how I can do better. I look forward to hearing from you.
Life Drain System
Yueliang_Haizi
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Apocalyps:Though I am in the first 10 chapters I cannot help but point out that from the beginning this novel does not set or describe us the current world building, power system, relationships(friends, family, etc) and the details or importance of the MC's action. It doesn't even properly describe his surrounding and situation. some would say that the author is being mysterious or add the details when the story progress but you see, to create a mysterious vibe you need to add minor details from the start of an arc or something, and then explain his actions or situations as the story progresses. Though the system and functions are good and I don't dislike the novel, most readers would not also like the novel because of so little details from the beginning.
The synopsis is where one is supposed to introduce what their story is about. This gives the reader a chance to see if they want to read it or not. In the case of this story the synopsis basically says "this story has a system". It failed to engage me as a reader. I typically read the reviews to get a better idea of the story but with so few chapters listed and the synopsis being what it is I find myself not interested. Most readers don't want to invest time reading something that doesn't engage them as readers and as such you've probably lost many potential readers because of such an underwhelming synopsis. Also once someone judges a book to not be worth their time they're not likely to reevaluate their decision. My suggestion is to update to a more comprehensive synopsis as soon as humanly possible and to update the artwork for your story at some point. The reason for updating the artwork is so those readers who may have already decided not to read your story will give it a new look over as it will look different to them meaning it might not be what they thought it was.
Though I am in the first 10 chapters I cannot help but point out that from the beginning this novel does not set or describe us the current world building, power system, relationships(friends, family, etc) and the details or importance of the MC's action. It doesn't even properly describe his surrounding and situation. some would say that the author is being mysterious or add the details when the story progress but you see, to create a mysterious vibe you need to add minor details from the start of an arc or something, and then explain his actions or situations as the story progresses. Though the system and functions are good and I don't dislike the novel, most readers would not also like the novel because of so little details from the beginning.