Mithren
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If I'm remembering correctly, sea creatures are sensitive to storms and stay away from the surface when they're near.
Ah you've read the MTL or raw. Yeah the quality dips after chapter 60 when it focuses on the Japanese as villains. Chinese racism for sure. I can understand remembering the past but ascribing the sins of the past to the present and never forgiving just makes China look bad. Should the world dig up all the crap China has done and shove it in their face for eternity? Cause there is a lot of crap China has done over the years. Honestly the people from China are okay in my books but less so the governing body that pushes such ideology to its people and the world. I feel bad for the ignorance of the writer.
A troll? Nice. But honestly you need to up your game. As far as an attack goes that was sub par at best. Almost kindergarten level. Try questing my IQ. It'll make you look like you know big words.
For a country that's stereotyped to be good at math I seem to find a lot of Chinese novels that really really suck at it... perhaps it's the translation. Doubt it though
You could at least give a reason so people can decide if they agree or not. There was one story where a person didn't like it cause the characters felt 'real' and there was no face slapping. They said it was boring cause it was a slice of life novel and lived up to what it professed to be. So why should someone skip this novel? What is it that you dislike about it? What are its flaws?
This clearly isn't the book for you. Nothing wrong with that. I like many others take offense though because you seem to indicate that the story is at fault rather than just not being the kind you like. To that end I'll kindly ask you to make a list of those face slappy and shallow novels that you so love. I'll use said list to know which novels I should avoid.
Maybe it only takes affect when he gets his license? Kind of like how the money only came once it was in his dad's hands and not the instant he won the competition.
l'm sad to say l'll be dropping this novel from those worth reading. It got too crude, rude, and inappropriate. earlier my review was."A rather fantastic read. The one majorflaw though is that it tries too hard to be a Florida man meme. It'd be better if it didn't force those moments. Still worth reading."To those who are fine with an otherwise interesting character suddenly doing anything to shock the reader cause " Florida Man" then it may still be a good read. Though for those who expect certain lines not to be crossed then you may be like me and steer clear.
Candy? Guess he's after your old man virginity and is gonna kidnap you. Don't ever trust a stranger with candy no matter what.
Finally! Been skim skipping to get back to what I'm actually invested in. I hate to criticize cause there's a lot of promise and potential in your writing. I don't want to discourage but I also want to point out faults so that the writing will keep getting better.
The tl;dr is that it needs work but shows promise. The author goes off on side tangents, dumps a lot of info, and fails at times to give the readers a reason to care about where things seem to be going. That said the author shows promise. I could see this being reworked a few times to become a proper book I'd be willing to buy to have on my shelf. The world and character feel like they've depth to them. The author just needs enough support to keep practicing their craft and before too long they'll be an amazing writer.
I realize that this is probably setting up a persistent character but as a reader I'm not invested in this chapter. To me this should have been resolved in at most 3 paragraphs or had built up reasons beforehand that'd leave me the reader invested in what was happening and the possible result. As it is I've skimmed it and feel like I could have skipped it and not missed anything important
Not sure how it was before but still a fair bit of info dumped in this chapter. Not bad by WebNovel standards. As it's needed info and currently doesn't feel like too much I don't mind. If that info can be worked into the story and less told to the audience then that'd be ideal.
"file himself up" does not flow well.
flight steps?