ladymanah
Nurse IRL, so expect dumb medical stuff sprinkled in. I have worked in the same nursing home for 8 years.
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I am giving you a 5 because it is well written and interesting! The only thing I would suggest is possibly push the world building out a few chapters because the first 3 chapters are slow and you want to ideally capture your reader's attention front the start. I would find a way to weave this stuff into the events of the story as trickles of info.
It sounds like me. It takes me all day to wake up, lol.
Hello~! Your writing is very good and the story is interesting. I hope you keep going! I always love BL best. I do suggest putting your chapters through a free grammar checker, though. there are so obvious errors and ways you could improve the text. I suggest quillbot through the browser. The app isn't as good I found. it provides very good suggestions. With my first novel, there were a lot of mistakes and people lowered the reviews because of it. People can be very picky. it was a lot of stupid typo errors because I write on my phone lol. Anyway, it improved my text tenfold. So, it may help you. too, as a new writer. I am hoping for your success! I will follow!