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It's actually shit. No joke. He keeps on forgetting about many of his cursed spirits that he has ( for ex forgets about his healing cursed spirit that he used to fully use limitless during the fight with the fumes cursed spirit and nearly died) and character interactions b/w mc and shoko and satomi are painful to read.Author makes the mc too op and then had to magically make him weaker. Plz author this story has alot of potential no joke. Can't u like commission some professional writer or some thing or atleast just move away from the jjk plot
Although the English is perfect, I can't stand how over dramatic the author is in the few chapters that I have read. Like dude the author was constantly saying cheesy as stuff, about how the mc and his friends resolve strengthened and some other bullshit. Sorry but I can't deal with that. I sure it's a good novel for some but for me it's shitty
This story is over all pretty good except from two major flaws. Idk if the writer is Chinese or he just reads way too many Chinese novels bcz the way of speech is too robotic and repetitive. If the author can add bit of a human touch it would be way better.( For example the way Scizor and cobalt used to argue in the 100s was too repetitive and the insults used were repeated continuously. It's used as comedic relief and that also pretty badly. Other than that the romance is cringy af. There's no such thing as love at first sight and I'm pretty disappointed that this novel went in that direction just for quicker 'lemon scenes'. Other than these there r some minor flaws that I can't bother to write rn but overall if the author takes care of these flaws that novel would be near purrrfect. [Ps: I dropped the novel at about 150th chapter so I don't know about the case of the last few chapters]
Dude if u were gonna make the story different from the original at least include that in ur synopsis. And learn to include the details, like one paragraph for everything in the UA entrance exam other than the physical test. And dude plz make the mc more lifelike. It's like he's some sort of robot during his training, like come on. If all ur trying to do is rushing into the part where he beats up people in this novel I suggest u try to learn how to actually learn how to write a novel.
This fan fic like many other is a wish fulfilment one where the author projects himself as the mc and does it badly. Meaning that nothing 'truly bad' is ever gonna happen to the mc. Another thing, the mc was alright with killing random ass thugs with Deadpool but when it comes to killing kingpin the mc makes it all dramatic. Like its a huge responsibility all bcz of a conversation he had with black noir(Im not sure that's his name) like I get it's a big thing but can u at least make him less of a hypocrite Oh yeah the latest arc is dragged out way too much for no reason In conclusion the author is not willing to let anything truly bad happen to his mc nor let the mc actually face any hardships. The author makes the fights overly dramatic too, though I can remember ii it's like that for the whole novel or only the latest arc. However it's Grammer and updating stability is not bad, so it's good enough to waste time
I understand ur uncomfortable with these type of stories but when u write ur comment like that, then it implies that ikiru had an actual choice about it. But no with the way how his life went it wasn't a question of who he would end up with. If u don't like the plot blame the author not a fictional character