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TheFilthyRhymer

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"Don't stress out yourself to things you can't control. :)" Want to support my work? Yes, you can through my Patreon https://www.patreon.com/TheFilthyRhymer

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  • TheFilthyRhymer
    TheFilthyRhymer8mth
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    The book's currently paused and needs a lot of reworking. So you guys might expect some unedited chapters from here on.

    Ch 1 Chapter 1 - Vivid Dreams, Crestel's Schemes
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    Eastern · TheFilthyRhymer
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  • TheFilthyRhymer
    TheFilthyRhymer8mth
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    Unique read and has potential, Li Wei has been soul-swapped with a guy's body in an urban cultivation world. The amazing part was the updates per chapter speed was insane. Has to work on some sentence flow but overall it was good. Keep it up author!

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    Soulbound Retribution: A Tale of Yin and Yang
    Urban · marvel_away
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  • TheFilthyRhymer
    TheFilthyRhymer8mth
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    Oh, that explains the confusing use of pronouns. May I suggest kindly that just use their original pronouns? Especially since it was their POV. Deep inside, they still claim themselves as the original right. I'm not familiar with gender swap troupe so I could be wrong. Good luck!

    Ch 2 Chapter 2 - The Hidden World
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    Soulbound Retribution: A Tale of Yin and Yang
    Urban · marvel_away
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  • TheFilthyRhymer
    TheFilthyRhymer8mth
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    Suggestion: "Her" closest friend, betrayed "her"

    But that was before Mei Ling, his closest friend and confidante, had betrayed him in the most profound way possible. Her heart pounded with a mixture of anger and betrayal that matched the city's pulsating energy.
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    Soulbound Retribution: A Tale of Yin and Yang
    Urban · marvel_away
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  • TheFilthyRhymer
    TheFilthyRhymer8mth
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    She's a she right? Suggestion: A vibrant young "woman".

    From her vantage point, she could see the sprawling streets, the futuristic architecture, and the people who went about their lives, oblivious to the turmoil raging within her. She had once been one of them—a vibrant young man with dreams of success, love, and happiness.
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    Soulbound Retribution: A Tale of Yin and Yang
    Urban · marvel_away
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  • TheFilthyRhymer
    TheFilthyRhymer8mth
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    To warm the climate is to not mix hot and cold but solely hot. Suggestion: "As if the devil was playing with hellfire to warm the climate."

    The atmosphere was heated, as if an angel were mixing cold and hot water to warm the climate. He approached her: "Is silence the best answer?" She forced a smile. "Yes, I did."
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    Redemption's Trial
    Teen · AbdulfatahFatima
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  • TheFilthyRhymer
    TheFilthyRhymer8mth
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    What's a test-free breakfast? I tried googling it but nothing came. Is it just simply free breakfast?

    Mrs. Leila's and Mr. Adeel's eyes met, and a burning sensation ensued as they both looked at each other with regret. "Are you ready for a test-free breakfast?" he asked with a strange laugh.
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    Redemption's Trial
    Teen · AbdulfatahFatima
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  • TheFilthyRhymer
    TheFilthyRhymer8mth
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    Fantastic first three chapters! No problem with the flow of the sentences, good job on that! One thing lacking was the depths of emotions. Instead of just saying this character was enthralled by the beauty of this view, how about showing it how? Like he reaches for the sky seemingly bewitched by the grand sky. Something like that, overall. Great work bro :)

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    Eternal Quest: Chronicles of the Virtual Realm
    Games · DirtyXiaoLongBao
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  • TheFilthyRhymer
    TheFilthyRhymer8mth
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    Great description, was able to imagine the scene very easily!

    Yi Heng's journey began in the shimmering city of Eternaland, where towering spires reached for the virtual sky, and the hum of magic resonated through the streets. In Eternaland's bustling plaza, players from all walks of life mingled, each with their own aspirations and dreams.
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    Eternal Quest: Chronicles of the Virtual Realm
    Games · DirtyXiaoLongBao
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  • TheFilthyRhymer
    TheFilthyRhymer8mth
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    Are we practicing the dao of word count here? The previous sentences in the first chapter were repeated here. No biggie tho xD

    Within the game, Yi Heng transformed into a Level 1 character, his class still a mystery—his potential, untapped. For in this realm, he was not just another player but "The Key" chosen by the game's enigmatic creators.
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    Eternal Quest: Chronicles of the Virtual Realm
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  • TheFilthyRhymer
    TheFilthyRhymer8mth
    Commented

    That was quite flawless :O

    Ch 1 Introduction:
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    Eternal Quest: Chronicles of the Virtual Realm
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  • TheFilthyRhymer
    TheFilthyRhymer8mth
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    Bro! Awesome start! A bit short though, it seems this one is more of a prologue.

    Ch 1 Introduction:
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    Eternal Quest: Chronicles of the Virtual Realm
    Games · DirtyXiaoLongBao
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  • TheFilthyRhymer
    TheFilthyRhymer8mth
    Posted

    What more do you want? Dual cultivation, kingdom toppling beauties, and your strong MC Aditya with a system. If you want to relax and simply enjoy an eventful cultivation/xianxia novel, then you're in the right book <3

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    Fairy Goddess System
    Fantasy · Mountain_Yogi
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  • TheFilthyRhymer
    TheFilthyRhymer8mth
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    A unique writing style of blending past and current events but what really captivates me is the interaction between characters, we have the silly yet realistic friends of ML and FL. Has good stability updates no doubt. We're just starting but the story's flow was good so far. Great job author!

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    Her Love, His Salvation
    Urban · itsShonali
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  • TheFilthyRhymer
    TheFilthyRhymer8mth
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    Great four chapters so far! The start was okay with the cliche MC got betrayed by her spouse during a deathly dole. We haven't seen much yet but it's quite anticipating where the futuristic world could take our dear Scarlet Su to. Writing style-wise, just the right amount of detailing, and would want you to read more. Keep it up, author!

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    Transmigrating from a zombie world to become the mecha kings wife
    Sci-fi · 1cutecat
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  • TheFilthyRhymer
    TheFilthyRhymer8mth
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    "of those" has been used twice.

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    Transmigrating from a zombie world to become the mecha kings wife
    Sci-fi · 1cutecat
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  • TheFilthyRhymer
    TheFilthyRhymer8mth
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    In writing style, the detailing was impeccable without a doubt, as seen in how many good reviews it has. The updates have been consistent in the last 7 chapters. The world will suck you in and will enthrall you in the feeling of being an assassin, great world-building, to say the least. We have seen few integral characters yet but they were unique on their own, so it's a plus for that.

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    Assassin Vendetta: The Beginning
    Action · MyLawDude
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  • TheFilthyRhymer
    TheFilthyRhymer8mth
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    A quick review: Has little to no grammar errors that could be ignored. The flow of the story was engaging as we followed Ryan in his tidings of survival and awakening to the harsh reality of betrayal. A good start for 4 chapters.

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    Legacy Of The Death Rifter
    Fantasy · AnimeTagz
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  • TheFilthyRhymer
    TheFilthyRhymer8mth
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    "until it disappointed back." Was it an error? My suggestions: until it disappeared back or until it dispersed back

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    Legacy Of The Death Rifter
    Fantasy · AnimeTagz
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  • TheFilthyRhymer
    TheFilthyRhymer8mth
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    5-star review from yours truly the author Devious Biscuit. Finally, we've reached above 15k words. A small achievement yet something to be happy about for a small author like me. I'll put the other story on pause and focus on this older novel of mine, SCP. Do expect a little kingdom-building from scratch and if anyone asked, there won't be a harem in this book.

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    The Soul Collector Pairs
    Fantasy · TheFilthyRhymer
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